A Cloud named Rage.
The Poppy Prompt
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The past is but a blink of time.
A world away, yet the memory
lingers and lingers
like the stench of an onion stained
deep within my fingertips.
Peel away those vengeful layers
tainted with guiltless satisfaction,
to reveal the one.
The one whose unfaithful actions
awakened the demon.
Dormant, yet always lurking
near the surface.
*
Overwhelmed by white light,
a thunderous storm
surrounded me in a cloak of betrayal.
I disappeared in a cloud of rage.
The rest is an enigmatic blur.
It was 2am…
*
I reemerged to a sunlit sky,
fuel that feeds the dandelions.
Like them, you were the
beautiful weed
corrupting my joyous landscape.
You were the one…
But so was he…
*
Passionate bullet holes
were discovered
painted on a once vibrant shell.
You were the recipient,
and so was he.
*
I now sit in a new home,
within a society of bad men,
yearning for your touch.
That opportunity evaporated
when I pulled the trigger.
May you frolic with him
in heaven's green grass
forevermore...
While I rot in my self-made hell...
About the Creator
Lamar Wiggins
Creative writer in the Northeast US who loves the paranormal, mystery, true crime, horror, humor, fantasy and poetry. Take a chance, you'll be thoroughly entertained.
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Comments (32)
Superior effort! Keep the outstanding work—congrats!
Wow Lamar!! This was breath taking!! Great work!
Whoa. Powerful descriptions. Well done. Congratulations on Top Story, Lamar 🌼
Back to say congratulations on your Top Story! 🎉💖🎊🎉💖🎊
So powerful and that image of the stench of the onion clinging - brilliant. And the picture at the end added so much to the words. Like a slamming shut. Congratulations on Top Story 🤍
"What was I thinking?" Famous last words, captured beautifully!
Wow, you hit all the prompts in a great story! I am truly impressed, my friend! Congratulations on Top Story!
Wow, super raw. Loved this!
There it is! Congrats on the |TS
Woah!! This was so impactful and such a unique point of view. Amazing!
I absolutely love the imagery in this poem, wow. "like the stench of an onion stained / deep within my fingertips." Like the senses you evoke with mere words! Incredible
Oh snap!! That felt like a punch to the gut. So many amazing lines. This was really wonderfully written, Lamar :) Congrats on top story!
Lamar you more the succeeded with he prompt you exceeded. so vibrant and moving.
Wow, poppy managed to draw something amazing out of everyone this month! Congrats on top story, Lamar, this is truly well deserved
Henceforth, Poppy Prompts shall only be referred to as "P-rompts." So has decreed the HWA chapter president for Vocal.
Wow incredible work! I love this poem!🥰
Oh. My. God. This is my favourite of the entries I've read. Absolutely fantastic. Well.done,.my friend.
"Retribution isn't mine..." Brilliantly written!!! Dark but loved it!!!❤️❤️💕
OOOOH! This is so darkly peeling away of everything. Soul searching and brilliant.
This is astoundingly good. I had to reread the beginning of this to let it sick in. So profound. "I reemerged to a sunlit sky, fuel that feeds the dandelions. Like them, you were the beautiful weed corrupting my joyous landscape." Those. Are. Wonderful. Lines. And that ending. Just wow.
So cleverly done... I got a shock when I read the last stanza! Beware of unbridled rage!
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Gosh, this was so intense, raw and emotional! I had to read it three times for the full effect of it to hit me with full force! Bloody brilliant!
Excellent work at the prompt Lamar! 😁👍
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