Poor Girls With Broken Hearts
Maybe Mama Does Know Best
She opened the door to the wiles of his ways,
Got lost inside, of his beautiful gaze.
Her mama kept praying, this was only a phase,
She too, loved a boy, till it all went sideways.
*
Baby, she begged him, can't you take me away?
I don't want to be somewhere; I can't see your face.
I told my mama, this is more than child's play,
But she says you'll soon leave me, all alone in this place.
*
But I'm not my mama, and you ain't my dad,
We have so much more love, than they ever had.
I have it all planned out, here in my notepad,
Show her your love for me, is ironclad.
*
Oh, poor girl you've dreamt it, all up in your head
He never meant anything, he ever said.
I know right now, you wish to heaven, that you were dead,
But baby, my girl, there is so much more, still ahead.
*
I ran from my mama, and chased after that boy,
There is no way on earth, he used my heart for a toy,
No ear for her warning, his words stuck in my head.
He promised me one day, that we would be wed.
*
My poor, poor baby girl, please don't you cry,
I can't bear to see that sad look in your eye.
I've been through it too, there is no good in goodbye,
but I can help you feel better, if you're willing to try.
*
In spite of myself, I asked of her, how,
will I ever feel better, oh please tell me now.
How did you get over your broken heart?
How can I get over us being a part?
*
She smiled as she pulled from her apron, a doll,
she said, say these words, on this paper, I scrawled.
Sewed with beads at the seams, and a flock of his hair.
this will even the odds and make this break-up fair.
She pulled out a needle from the dress that she wore,
She said, make me a promise, she made sure, I swore.
It was dingy and frayed, with a smile on its face,
She said, now the magic will put him in his place.
*
I hesitated a moment, then I repeated the vow,
Nothing could stop the incantation now.
I saw the sparks fly and the smell of the fire,
The louder I spoke, all the flames, they grew higher.
*
The room started to spin, and my head it did too,
She stirred a concoction and called it her brew.
The lights flickered a bit, and the candles blew out,
In a flash I understood what she had been talking about.
*
All the feelings I felt for him, were washed all away,
I began to feel lucky I had decided to stay.
In the mirror a reflection, but it wasn't mine,
I could see the magic surround him, it had him entwined.
*
He pulled and he tugged, there was fear in his eyes,
He would come to regret leaving me, with goodbye.
Then, she pulled at the thread that held together his head,
It only took a few moments, till I knew he was dead.
*
My mama took my hand as she whispered these words,
There is a dark place in hell for boys who play games with the girls.
He made the same mistake that your daddy made too,
Poor girls like us, won't be played for a fool.
*
Now that you have this hurt, under your belt,
You'll understand now, how I knew how you felt.
I couldn't save you from the pain he would bring,
But compared to his fate, yours was only a sting.
*
She stood up and held me, kissed the top of my head,
Now run along girl, don't repeat what's been said.
Just be sure to remember, how you felt, after love lost,
Be sure to protect your heart, anyway, any cost.
About the Creator
Kelli Sheckler-Amsden
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Comments (29)
Superb https://vocal.media/horror/the-ghosty-car-ghost-story
Wow, this is a different one for you. It's like a story, excellent.
Congratulations!!!!
What a beautiful flow throughout the entire piece. Wonderful. Congratulations
Congratulations on your Top Story
This was great and very deserving of a Top Story
Hahaha! Love to hear about a man losing his head. Great stuff and it totally deserves to be a top story. Awesome.
WOW! absolutely deserves to be a top story congrats!
Absolutely loved it...!
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Super!!! Excellent story!!! Congratulations on your Top Story
Snap, snap, snap!!
Congratulations on your Top Story❤️🎉😉
Oooooo, that Mama's mean! I love the fact you wrote a horror poem, I've never thought to do that! Loved it! Creeped me out! Well done!
Okay, I'm impressed...and a little terrified (reading Stephen King now, so it helps). Excellent work...and I promise to break no other hearts out there... ;)
Great stuff!
Congratulations Kelli 😎🥇
Oh my. That's fantastic. Congrats on the TS
Damn, that got DARK. And all for a break-up. I feel like I should steer clear of these poor girls! Great poem! The rhymes were fun to see changing throughout, and the rhythm was so perfect; it flowed and read so easily. Congrats on TS!!
Yes!! congrats, Kelli!!
Congratulations on Top Story AND for making the leaderboard! Way to go, Heather!
Good work and poignant. This could be used in a Family counseling session for parenting education learning how to deal with various kinds of relationships.
Oh yes, there's definitely a specific dark place in hell for boys like that! He got what he deserved! I wish I can do that too, lol!
Captivating story, beautifully & lyrically written. But is there no hope for love ever?
Superbly written & loving it!!!❤️❤️💕