The Hoist
Engagement Time
She knew his shoe size, credit score, and medical history. His favorite comedian, restaurant, cup size, and position. He followed the dealership’s recommended vehicle maintenance schedule and called his mom every weekend. Videos and audios and socials, oh my. She knew him from every angle.
Wearing the high-waisted, faux leather, ballroom skirt and skin-toned lacy bralette, she waltzed up beside him and ordered his favorite drink.
“Make it neat,” she said with familiar inflection, drumming her red coffin-tipped nails.
A glance. Another. Afraid but intrigued, he took a third.
“Do I know you?” she asked.
“Not yet,” he said, “but if I’m lucky, that’ll change.”
Her laugh. “Forward, but refreshing. Thank you.”
Their fingers mingled as their eyes first met. From the safety of his browbone cave, he gestured a question. She nodded.
His chest felt strong beneath her palm. Hairless, she knew. He was hopeful. Sure heartbeats made themselves known in her fingertips.
His pulse. Her pulse.
His pulse. Her pulse.
“I’m Santiago,” he said, sliding her hand between the top two buttons of his shirt.
Metal fingers ejected with razor fine edges.
“I’m Alai,” she said, carving through flesh.
Cracking his sternum, she twisted and hoisted it out.
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As my husband would say, "It's so happy!" Loved it!
Love it, I was wondering what the crime was going to be, first thought was robbery and then BAM!!!
Masterful storytelling and magnificent micro fiction. Congratulations and well done
whaaaaaat!! That was so unexpected! Congratulations! :D
She took the phrase "stole his heart" quite literally
Oh whoa! I didn't expect THAT to be the heist! What a great twist, what a great tale! And congratulations on second place, well deserved!
You did a terrific job of building towards the fantastic twist with so few words/such little space to work. Leaves me wanting to know more about the characters backstories and the world they inhabit. Great job!
Nice set up , great finish. Congratulations
This had me intrigued, hooked, and then pleasantly shocked. Loved it!
Well set-up for your brutal ending. Congratulations!
Bravo! I am in awe of your writing. Was my favorite read from this challenge by far! Well done
Oh very dark well done congratulations 🎊
Scary date. Well done on the second place.
Holy smokes. Your writing is electric, and this type of story really displayed your magical skills. You executed this brilliantly!! I think I audibly said, "whoa" and then had to read it again. Fantastic piece! Congratulations!
Ohhhh creepy, freaky, just wild! There is so much info revealed at the end, my head is kinda spinning. I'm still trying to figure it all out, but this is amazing writing. I love all the predatory imagery of Alai; it send my heart racing from the beginning. Many congratulations! This is so good. 🎉❤️💯
Congrats on your win! Very amazing story with a good twist!
Congratulations 🎉 🎉😉✨
Nicely done. Congrats
Congrats. Great hoist.
Perfectly executed! Congratulations on the challenge placement!
Nice work! Congratulations on your well-deserved win. You earned a new subscriber, and I'm looking forward to reading more
Ouuuu, just wow! I loved every second of this. Incredible work. Every word was beautifully weighed. Congratulations! This was wonderful. 💓
Wow. That is all.