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The Bronze Hourglass

Karl's Quest for Gluttony

By Kyle MaddoxPublished 12 months ago Updated 12 months ago 1 min read
Top Story - June 2023
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The Bronze Hourglass
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Darkness fell. The silver glow of the moon alerted Karl it was time to begin. Carefully planned, painstakingly checked, and strategically synchronized with the security watchdog's erratic schedule, tonight was a mission go.

He could see his prize taunting him, calling from across the yard, bathing under the intense light of the moon. He observed it tease him, brilliantly exclaiming its beauty. He rallied his comrade and they set out to begin their quest.

Griffin, Karl's trusty accomplice, yawned as he stood watch at the base of the tree. He had been known to fall asleep on sentry duty before, but tonight had to be different. This was their only opportunity. Security might not be gone this long again for another month!

Karl checked in a final time with Griffin, his pudgy back already leaning against the tree as if to fall asleep. The clock had started. Griffin confirmed the panic word and Karl charged.

He sprinted hard and fast across the emerald lawn, dodging the gargantuan sprinkler heads as they leaped from the earth. Finally, he crested his target. He stood tall and proud on his hoard, the birdfeeder's bronze dome still gleaming. The moonlight now illuminates his glory.

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Kyle Maddox

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  • jarlyme Sulite11 months ago

    very nice this is second time to read keep it up.. Good Day!

  • Lol, that twist was awesome! Fantastic story! I've subscribed to you!

  • Dana Crandell12 months ago

    Very well done! Congratulations on Top Story!

  • CJ Miller12 months ago

    Awesome job! I was very invested in where this was going, and it paid off. ⭐️ I also love your writing style. Tense, direct, clear.

  • Mohammad Imran12 months ago

    Well done

  • Cathy holmes12 months ago

    Lol. This is great. Well done and congrats on the TS

  • A. Lenae12 months ago

    Your writing in this is sharp and consistent. Your tone smoothly and subtly carries the reader in one direction, only to pivot so seamlessly. I really like the way you wove this together! Great work!

  • Kendall Defoe 12 months ago

    Excellent!

  • Lamar Wiggins12 months ago

    Excellent story telling the led us (me) in a completely different direction. Congrats!!!

  • K. C. Wexlar12 months ago

    fun read and creative!

  • Dana Stewart12 months ago

    Excellent micro fiction! Loved the fun and daring thief!

  • jarlyme Sulite12 months ago

    Wow nice, it was smooth.. love it...

  • Mackenzie Davis12 months ago

    So cute and a blast to read! Love the little twist as we zoomed out and saw the “high stakes” for what they are. 😆

  • Babs Iverson12 months ago

    Super fun read!!! Loving it!!!♥️♥️💕

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