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A reluctant awakening

By Cathy holmesPublished 17 days ago 1 min read
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“Wake up, sweet child. It’s time to dress.”

She stirs her daughter from a peaceful slumber to let her know that time has come.

“But Papa?” the child wonders. “What about Papa? Won’t he be mad? Won’t he say it’s still his turn?”

“Papa is tired,” Mother tells her. “He’s ready to rest now.”

She’s confused, the little girl. Mother doesn’t blame her. She can see that the land is still covered in white, and how the trees still look like giant marshmallows. She felt last night's storm.

The child so young, yet wise beyond her time. It is too soon; much too soon. But the world has changed. It’s not like it was in her elder sisters’ time, and will change again before her younger sisters’ time. The child doesn’t realize that last night’s storm was Papa’s swan song. He is weak and growing more tired with every cycle of seasons.

The land may be covered in a fluffy blanket of white today, but underneath, blades of green are stirring, eager to poke their heads out into the cool air. Birds are singing in the distance. Temperatures are rising.

Humans are spending more time outside. They’re laughing. They’re having fun. They’re chattering joyously of yet another early spring.

“But don’t they know it’s too soon, mama?” she asks, with a look of concern that should never appear on a face so innocent.

“Yes, my child," Mother replies. "Unfortunately, they do.”

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Cathy holmes

Canadian family girl with a recently discovered love for writing. Other loves include animals and sports.

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  • Tiffany Gordon 3 days ago

    Fabulous work!!

  • C. H. Richard10 days ago

    Beautiful story Cathy ❄️♥️❄️♥️

  • Kristen Balyeat12 days ago

    Wow, so well done, Cathy! The way you presented this is brilliant. I love this *story*! Such an amazing entry!

  • ROCK 14 days ago

    What amazes me is that in your biography you mention that you discovered your love of writing just recently; I am so grateful you are putting it all down here for us to read in awe.

  • Caroline Jane14 days ago

    Love the message in this. Really clever.

  • Sian N. Clutton15 days ago

    Very clever. Very moving. Well done!

  • You painted a very vivid thought provoking image with this one

  • Holly Pheni16 days ago

    Oh my goodness! There is so much to feel here, I don't have words to say it. Very moving and deeply spoken.

  • Heather Hubler16 days ago

    Ugh, I wish everyone got it :( This was wonderfully layered. Brilliant work, my friend.

  • Very lovely! Well-wrought!

  • Chloe Gilholy17 days ago

    This was beautiful and poignant.

  • Hannah Moore17 days ago

    Ouch, this is so elegantly done, and you're talking to me. I know. I care even. But I'm a hypocrite in how I live, often.

  • Apparently I'm the only one who doesn't get it. I read all the comments and still don't get it 😅 It's something to do with the seasons but if you don't mind, can you please explain it to me? 😅 Your photo is soooo beautiful!

  • Leslie Writes17 days ago

    So sad and true. Well done 😢

  • JBaz17 days ago

    What a clever way to point out the change in seasons and natures views on the cycle change.

  • Babs Iverson17 days ago

    Brilliant & beautiful!!! Loved it!!!💕♥️♥️

  • Colt Henderson17 days ago

    Beautifully written! Great work.

  • J17 days ago

    Subtle, yet crucial. I really loved this one.

  • L.C. Schäfer17 days ago

    How beautiful, well done Cathy!

  • So beautiifully written Cathy, as always but the message really got to me x

  • Dana Crandell17 days ago

    Oh, my friend, you've outdone yourself with this one! What a marvelous read!

  • This is such a unique way to look at the seasons. Well done. I can only imagine what such a personification would be like where I live. Normally, we say that we only have two seasons: winter (what passes for winter here) and summer, nothing in between. Now, it’s hard to tell what’s going on. They must be getting out of bed, going back to bed, and arguing all over the place.

  • We had about two weeks of winter this year where the temperatures dropped to single digits (both sides of zero Fahrenheit), & we got some decent snow. But the grass never did lose it's green entirely. Right now it just looks like summer grass without watering. BTW, love the story.

  • Mother Combs17 days ago

    I love this!! I'll never see the seasons the same again

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