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Dream Come True

By C. H. RichardPublished 12 months ago Updated 12 months ago 1 min read
Top Story - June 2023
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Kendall watched and waited while sitting on the designated park bench. His hands clasped the black gym bag that contained his savings, cashed in 401 K and recent paycheck earnings. He still could not believe he was going to purchase his dream Mickey Mantle rookie card. He found the seller on-line. His fingers trembled, checking his watch once again. His thoughts were interrupted when he heard yelling.

“Kendall Come Here!”

Kendall looked up to see a gray-haired man walking to him. With anticipation he ran towards gentleman.

Out of breath, Kendall unzipped the bag, “It’s all there!” The man’s eyes widened.

“Do you have the card?” Kendall could not hold back his excitement.

“Card?” The man composed a smile looking at the money, “Ah yes! It is back in the car.”

A little Boston Terrier came running up to Kendall. “There you are! My escape artist!” The man scooped up the pup, grabbed the gym bag and scooted away assuring Kendall he would be “right back!”

Kendall checked his phone seeing a text from the seller,

“I’ll be there in five minutes!”

Kendall responded, “No worries! Cute dog by the way!"

Kendall’s phone pinged again, “What dog?”

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About the Creator

C. H. Richard

My passion is and has always been writing. I am particularly drawn to writing fiction that has relatable storylines which hopefully keep readers engaged

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    The story invoked strong personal emotions

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    Zero grammar & spelling mistakes

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  • rose amy5 months ago

    Great

  • Rachel Deeming7 months ago

    Oh no. Poor Kendall. Great microfiction!

  • Samrah nadeem8 months ago

    Nice story 👍

  • Gina C.12 months ago

    Oh man, she got scammed! I feel so bad for Kendall; this was so well done, Cindy! 🤗❤️

  • Oh no never let the money go till you see the goods

  • Ruth Stewart12 months ago

    So well-written, as always. I was drawn right into this story. Poor Kendall, though. Fabulous work, congratulations on top story.

  • Holly Pheni12 months ago

    Fun story with a nice twist at the end!

  • Cathy holmes12 months ago

    Oops, that would suck. Great twist.

  • C.Z.12 months ago

    Excellent twist!

  • Cendrine Marrouat12 months ago

    Good story with an interesting concept.

  • Rookie mistake.

  • J. S. Wade12 months ago

    Poor Kendall. Great story ! 😜🥰

  • Heather Hubler12 months ago

    Ah man!!! That was heartbreaking. Poor Kendall. I wanted him to have that card. But maybe he'll get a sweet pup instead :) Wonderful storytelling, congratulations on Top Story!!

  • Hahahaha oh no! That would have my heart sink right out of my chest! That was so well written. Great job and congrats on the top story!

  • Mackenzie Davis12 months ago

    Oh dear. I almost want to see Kendall’s reaction, but you ended it perfectly; seeing it would have subtracted too much emotional weight I think. This is a great example of solid character development. Well done!

  • Melissa Ingoldsby12 months ago

    You can feel the anxiety and realization of what happened when that last text goes through! Very sad! I feel bad for Kendall! Congratulations on a very well written top story!

  • Paul Stewart12 months ago

    oh...crap. Poor Kendall! Well written, Cindy! Congrats on Top Story!

  • Khadijah Olayemi12 months ago

    This is an interesting write up.

  • S.A.D. Alaka12 months ago

    It took me a minute to get it, I'm not gonna lie

  • S.A.D. Alaka12 months ago

    It took me a minute to get it, I'm not gonna lie

  • Addrianna Wing12 months ago

    I'm a sucker for baseball so I of course immediately had to give this a read. Congrats btw!!

  • Nobody12 months ago

    Great one

  • Caroline Jane12 months ago

    Oh no... devastating! Congratulations on the top story. ❤️

  • Great and Creative 💖📝Also Congratulations on your Top Story❗

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