Rookie Card
Dream Come True
Kendall watched and waited while sitting on the designated park bench. His hands clasped the black gym bag that contained his savings, cashed in 401 K and recent paycheck earnings. He still could not believe he was going to purchase his dream Mickey Mantle rookie card. He found the seller on-line. His fingers trembled, checking his watch once again. His thoughts were interrupted when he heard yelling.
“Kendall Come Here!”
Kendall looked up to see a gray-haired man walking to him. With anticipation he ran towards gentleman.
Out of breath, Kendall unzipped the bag, “It’s all there!” The man’s eyes widened.
“Do you have the card?” Kendall could not hold back his excitement.
“Card?” The man composed a smile looking at the money, “Ah yes! It is back in the car.”
A little Boston Terrier came running up to Kendall. “There you are! My escape artist!” The man scooped up the pup, grabbed the gym bag and scooted away assuring Kendall he would be “right back!”
Kendall checked his phone seeing a text from the seller,
“I’ll be there in five minutes!”
Kendall responded, “No worries! Cute dog by the way!"
Kendall’s phone pinged again, “What dog?”
About the Creator
C. H. Richard
My passion is and has always been writing. I am particularly drawn to writing fiction that has relatable storylines which hopefully keep readers engaged
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Comments (42)
Nice story 👍
Oh man, she got scammed! I feel so bad for Kendall; this was so well done, Cindy! 🤗❤️
Oh no never let the money go till you see the goods
So well-written, as always. I was drawn right into this story. Poor Kendall, though. Fabulous work, congratulations on top story.
Fun story with a nice twist at the end!
Oops, that would suck. Great twist.
Excellent twist!
Good story with an interesting concept.
Rookie mistake.
Poor Kendall. Great story ! 😜🥰
Ah man!!! That was heartbreaking. Poor Kendall. I wanted him to have that card. But maybe he'll get a sweet pup instead :) Wonderful storytelling, congratulations on Top Story!!
Hahahaha oh no! That would have my heart sink right out of my chest! That was so well written. Great job and congrats on the top story!
Oh dear. I almost want to see Kendall’s reaction, but you ended it perfectly; seeing it would have subtracted too much emotional weight I think. This is a great example of solid character development. Well done!
You can feel the anxiety and realization of what happened when that last text goes through! Very sad! I feel bad for Kendall! Congratulations on a very well written top story!
oh...crap. Poor Kendall! Well written, Cindy! Congrats on Top Story!
This is an interesting write up.
It took me a minute to get it, I'm not gonna lie
It took me a minute to get it, I'm not gonna lie
I'm a sucker for baseball so I of course immediately had to give this a read. Congrats btw!!
Nice one
Great one
Oh no... devastating! Congratulations on the top story. ❤️
Great and Creative 💖📝Also Congratulations on your Top Story❗
Congratulations on you Tope Story. I loved it. Well deserved.
Oh, this is * so * clever!! Great work! You seriously nailed this prompt! 👏🏻💓