Red vs. Blue
Vocal Community Microfiction Series - Unbalanced
"Hey old man!" Martin approached the older man in the blue jersey. "You're in the Red Zone."
"Ah, sorry," the older man said. "I couldn't really see from back there."
Martin looked up at the large screens. "Seems clear to me."
"Actually, it's my son," said the man. "I couldn't see him at all."
"He's playing?"
"Yeah!" The older man squinted. "Do you know if he's winning?"
The screen flashed and a cry rose. Martin read the score.
"Yes sir," Martin said as Team Red began to groan. "He sure is."
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Comments (7)
Oh, that is so sweet.
Very cool Microfiction story!!!
Awww, that was so touching and emotional! That song is gonna be stuck in my head now, lol!
Another great story! You're unstoppable! 😍 Nice touch with the song :)
Great strory📝😉❤️
I love the story, love the song.
Nice story! And that song at the end is really catchy. Hope is doesn’t play in my head all day. 😅