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“Nobody Can Hear A Scream In The Vacuum Of Space, Or So They Say.”

by Mike Singleton - Mikeydred 13 days ago in Series
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A Chat Fiction Take On The Vocal New Worlds Challenge

Based On The Title A Night Cafe Creation by Mike Singleton

“Nobody can hear a scream in the vacuum of space, or so they say.”

This is a story for the Vocal “New Worlds Challenge” which you can find out about below.

Writer: “Nobody can hear a scream in the vacuum of space, or so they say.”

Editor: “What sort of a first line is that, you’re supposed to be writing a science fiction story, starting a book, and all you can do is rip off the punch line from ‘Alien’ , come on you gotta do better than that”

The writer is a budding author , the editor is a robot with Artificial Intelligence, no empathy, no sympathy, is “results driven” and has deadlines to meet which will be met whatever the consequences. The blood and bones of many would-be authors are on the metal hands of this would be rootic Citizen Kane.

Writer: “But you asked for a space situated story and what is ‘Alien’ , I have never heard of it?”

Editor: “‘Alien is a 1979 science fiction horror film directed by Ridley Scott and written by Dan O'Bannon based on a story by O'Bannon and Ronald Shusett. The tagline is ‘In space no one can hear you scream’ , see what I mean?”

Writer: “Yeah I definitely see, and my line is a bit rubbish when you compare it to that one, what’s the film about?”

Editor: “The commercial space cruiser Nostromo comes across a mysterious derelict spaceship on an undiscovered moon,and the crew find themselves up against an aggressive and deadly extraterrestria. It then ironically spawned a franchise, the follow up ‘Aliens’ was even better, but then it went downhill. It made a star of Sigourney Weaver and the monster designed by the Swiss artist H.R. Giger was a superb horrific design”

Writer: “I will have to watch it. So are you ok with the rest of my story if I change my first line?”

Editor: “I didn’t even read past the first line. That first line was so bad that I decided it would only go downhill from there so it was not worth my time and effort. You are not the only writer that I am dealing with.

You are not the only writer that I am dealing with.,

You are not the only writer that I am dealing with.,

Click Click Click


Sorry about that”

Writer: “So if I change that first line you will read and edit the rest of my book?”

Editor: “THe Quality of Mercy Is Not Strnnnne”

Writer: “Are You Ok? Can you edit my work, I really need this book published”

Writer (to Himself): “I really miss human editors when you could trust what they said or have a good argument. You can put your case. It’s like when they brought in auto checkouts in supermarkets and petrol stations. If something goes wrong you need a human to sort it out and fix it”

The Editor’s display goes blank. It just shut down. The Writer leaves the room and remembers he has seen no other humans in the building apart from other writers. You cannot see an editor without a designated appointment, and ironically you can only get an appointment by sending a handwritten letter to the Department of Edits as they do not do emails or phone calls.

The Writer walks out into another day into this dystopia, if he can’t get his book accepted he can’t get any money to pay his rent and food. He will be out on the street and without the ability to write anywhere since the libraries were all shut.

Outside in the street he screamed.

He had to find another way out of this


About the author

Mike Singleton - Mikeydred

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  • Call Me Les6 days ago

    Unique! This dialogue method is quite interesting for exploring a character's mind.

  • The underlying tongue in cheek is great! LOVED this! ❤

  • E. J. Strange9 days ago

    Very different! Nice

  • Scott Wade12 days ago

    Ha ha. Excellent! I guess you had to end it there before his abdomen started convulsing and the Baby Alien burst through his skin into the world. Thoroughly enjoyed.

  • You can write something that can make me laugh and yet have the audacity to say you can't do comedy, lol! Loved the Editor! That AI was so funny! You did an amazing job on this!

  • Rick Henry12 days ago

    Clever format and good use of humor.

  • Angel Whelan12 days ago

    Good job! It was cruel to give us a first line that is a direct rip off of an existent story. Your response was funny and enjoyable

  • Morgana Miller13 days ago

    Bahaha, love the tongue-in-cheek. This was really fun to read, a bit too relatable. ;)

  • Pardon me, your sarcasm is showing :) I love it!!

  • Elizabeth Diehl13 days ago

    This is so relatable as a writer and yet fits into science fiction perfectly!

  • Omg wow Mike very good! :)

  • Cathy holmes13 days ago

    Very well done, Mike. I like ir.

  • Heather Hubler13 days ago

    Goodness, was this supposed to be horror sci-fi, lol? It sure seems like something that could happen in the future. Loved the format!! Great work :)

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