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In Plain Sight

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By Heather HublerPublished 11 months ago β€’ 3 min read
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"Step right up, young lady! Have I got the deal of a lifetime for you. Results are 100% gen-u-ine, certifiably certifiable. You will look half your age in only moments, guaranteed."

Stevens' wiry hand shot out and latched on to the old woman in the front of the crowd, now looking understandably wary.

She resisted a bit, saying the same excuses he'd heard before, "Ach, you've got the wrong person for the job, haven't you? I don't believe in your witchy nonsense."

"No, my dear. I've got exactly the right one," he breathed.

He hauled her sizable mass onto the small platform with surprising ease. As she settled onstage, he got right to work covering her in a misty cloud of 'magic' formula.

She coughed and hacked. He whirled and twisted.

The crowd was in a frenzy, clapping and cheering.

A light flashed off to the side, his cue to hit the tiny lever behind the podium while shouting, "Let's give her a round of applause for her bravery, folks!"

People always missed what was in plain sight.

While the sheep were caught up in the mad display, the perfectly placed mirrors shifted. Everyone's eye naturally drawn now to Ruby, his voluptuous partner, and not the trap door Stevens was sending his prey through to the cage beneath.

Atlo was in position to chloroform the unsuspecting victim the moment she hit the ground.

Ruby played the part perfectly. She was dressed in similar-enough clothes, roughly the same height, but with significantly less wrinkles, healthy looking hair and a much nicer figure.

These small-town people were easily fooled.

Their plan had never been foiled. Ruby would go back to the victim's home continuing to play the part, and then they'd push out in the middle of the night, spreading rumors along their travels that the old woman had moved on to greener pastures with her newfound youth.

The three worked together like a well-oiled machine, making a tidy profit from their "Granny's Candies and Sweets" business, but it seemed they were always in need of grannies.

Ruby once suggested they simply hire one. Ludicrous.

Stevens knew it must be a bonafide granny.

It took a bit, but he always found the right one. Plump like a swollen sack of flour. Sang softly while she baked. Had a smile that could warm a boy's battered heart.

He couldn't just hire someone like that, Ruby was daft for thinking it.

Although Stevens could admit, it was getting harder and harder to find good ones. It took him almost four days this time. And then he had to plant the seeds to lure her to the show. Usually a bit of stubborn skepticism and town gossip did the trick.

Several times, he considered just making the grab straight from the target's home, but they made a good hunk of silver off their one-time deal on the aging spray and whatever valuable things they could scavenge.

He may need to start looking for a new Ruby though. He and Atlo had been discussing it of late. She was beginning to show her age, and they needed dramatic results to sell.

By the time the crowd dispersed, Stevens had convinced himself that this was Ruby's last show.

He'd dispatch her on the road, and that would be that.

Nightfall came swiftly. Pitch black from a moonless sky giving he and Atlo perfect cover to move granny into the back of the wagon.

"Boss, we'd best be going," Atlo whispered. "I think some of them was on to us this time. Somethin' don't feel right."

Stevens clapped a hand on his shoulder, squeezing a little too hard, a subtle warning.

"What, these simpletons? They're never on to us. Just do what needs done so we can be on our way. We've got an extra task tonite."

Hours later, it was beginning to look as though Atlo may have been right. Stevens' pocket watch showed half past two.

Ruby was late.

He'd miss the valuables, but things were not looking good. They needed to move out. He hated leaving a loose end though. Ruby could cause problems if she sold them out.

"Atlo, take the wagon to the safe point. I'll take care of Ruby, and then meet you there."

His meaning was perfectly clear–Ruby would not be surviving the night.

Except in his arrogance, Stevens failed to realize he was playing the part of the fool this time. The mirrors had shifted.

A sharp blade swept across his throat bringing a line of crimson to the surface.

"Should've looked a little harder at the old woman you put in the carriage," Ruby rasped. "You and Atlo have gotten so careless. Don't worry though, I'm going to make this business something to be proud of while the two of you fade to dust."

In the end, Stevens couldn't help but notice he was still right. People always missed what was in plain sight.

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  • Gina C.11 months ago

    Genius twist my friend! A truly perfect take on missing what's in plain sight. One of the many things I love about your writing is how witty and intelligent it is, while still remaining fluid 😍 This was a delightful read, with a bit of darkness!

  • Cendrine Marrouat11 months ago

    Well written, Heather! Yes, people tend to miss what is in plain sight very often. Have you ever thought of writing cozy mystery stories? I bet you would be very good at it.

  • Snake oil salesman with a twist--of the wrist, a flick of the knife & off into the night.

  • Dana Stewart11 months ago

    Nice twist!

  • Paul Stewart11 months ago

    Great job, Heather. This hooked me from the beginning, and there's that clever head for a good ol' fashion twist. I found it all unsettling and felt there would be some comeuppance, but I didn't know from where. Also, the picture is perfect. A+ and a selection of mini nibbles from the pastry cart for you. 🍰πŸ₯§πŸ₯ŸπŸ©πŸ₯

  • Ahhh, that was a good play of missing what's in plain sight. I loved Ruby the moment I saw her name. I used that name too for my main character in my poem, The Chronicles of Red. I can see your Ruby as the future of my Ruby. Loved your story my sweet fear friend!

  • Doc Sherwood11 months ago

    The darkest of dark comedy! I love the way this story calls on that hoary old tradition of the travelling pedlar, beloved of western and period drama. For of course there were such people, trading everything from miracle cures and rain-making machines to the elixir of eternal youth as here. Instead of repeating and recycling the corpus of cliches bound up with this shady tradition, you artfully skate just near enough to these for the reader to feel they're on familiar ground, even as we grow more and more appalled by the outrageous crimes of these con-men and woman. Stevens, in particular, is just close enough to the melodramatic archetype of moustache-twirling villain (I absolutely love "simpletons" from him!) but never so overdone that the story loses its edge. For at the end of the day, there's nothing either funny or endearing about people who prey on their fellow human beings for profit, and the murderous climax to your tale would make anyone think twice about romanticizing such despicable individuals. A superb read to start my morning, thank you Heather!

  • Gokila11 months ago

    wow epic one!

  • Amjad Ateih Dib11 months ago

    well done great job

  • Clyde E. Dawkins11 months ago

    WOW what a twist! Very captivating story!

  • Dana Crandell11 months ago

    Clever!

  • Sandra Tena Cole11 months ago

    Brilliant one!! Love Ruby! ❣️

  • Babs Iverson11 months ago

    Wonderful!!! Loved it!!!β€οΈβ€οΈπŸ’•

  • Another great story from your pen Heather

  • KJ Aartila11 months ago

    HA! Brilliant! πŸ’•

  • Cathy holmes11 months ago

    Oh, this was great. Well done, my friend.

  • Donna Renee11 months ago

    Yesssss! I love it! As soon as I started reading this I was thinking β€œOooh I really can’t stop!” and I love that feeling 😁😁

  • Veronica Coldiron11 months ago

    Oh heck yeah! LOVED this so much!! You know, you already had me at the wagon, but even the first line whispered "come read me". The voice was so peppered with the flavor of the carnival callers from my youth, too. There's something so... Dr. Sleep about this... it's eerie. Great job!! :)

  • Wow, that was a Great Story with an Extreme Twist β€οΈπŸ˜‰πŸ“πŸ’―πŸ€£β—

  • Wow. I did not see that coming! Great story!

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