Hatfields and McCoys – this one. Uninvited Romeo crashes a rave. Meets fair Juliet, from wrong side of tracks. Cupid owns both. Juliet’s BFF helps lovers, iconic balcony scene. Mistaken identity leads to Romeo’s banishment. Juliet goes with Padre’s plan. Text failed to send. Families grieve, forgive all but two.
About the Creator
Reader insights
Outstanding
Excellent work. Looking forward to reading more!
Top insights
Excellent storytelling
Original narrative & well developed characters
Expert insights and opinions
Arguments were carefully researched and presented
Eye opening
Niche topic & fresh perspectives
Heartfelt and relatable
The story invoked strong personal emotions
Keep reading
More stories from Dana Stewart and writers in Critique and other communities.
The Seven Husbands of Evelyn Hugo
In 1950’s Hollywood, manipulative Evelyn Hugo is determined to be a movie star, morals be damned, just like husband number two. An elderly Hugo confesses her sins and secrets – and all the nitty gritty details. Hugo’s seven marriages are a predictable good read, final secret will leave you slackjawed.
By Dana Stewart9 months ago in Critique
Delegating and Assigning
I was reading an article in a nursing newspaper 'The Pelican News' for April, May and June of this year. The article that I read feels like it could appeal to all professions is entitled 'Delegating and Assigning: What You Need to Know'. The author Cynthia Saver has blocked out at the end of the article 'Five Rights of Delegation'. I am going to retype these five verbatim for I do not want to misinterpret them.
By Mark Graham5 days ago in Critique
We'z Walking on a Path Ruled By Numbers
This road has felt endless, yet limited; every step tracked. Inching away along this path, I feel trapped. Confined. Left to this narrow passage that may one day amount to something greater. Time is not a concept. Only distance. From start to finish, I laugh and cry and attempt to convince myself that this is worth it. I cannot stray. I must keep going. Every step etched, is a step taken, is measured as more than before. I cannot even recall how I got here. Maybe I don’t even really exist. Just another tick marking off a perceived presence. Of what though? I am just another line drawn. Nothing more, nothing less.
By Oneg In The Arctic4 days ago in Fiction
Comments (17)
Love the hatfields and mccoys reference
Dear D-bud ~ Lovely selection ~ *Just want to say what a terrific heart you have for always being there for our little Village; including me. J-bud
That was a modern Romeo and Juliet story worth reading. Great imagery use of words 💕
Wonderful absolutely wonderful!!! Brief and captures the complete story!!! Loving it, Dana!!!
Great critique, Dana! Excellent brief, yet full recap! 👏🏽👏🏽👏🏽
Great critique! You def packed it in there. 👋🏻
Didn't see it, but I got the picture. Great review, Bravo.
'Text failed to send' ... love it! Love the critique. Incredibly well done, Dana 💕😊
This is great, I love it! "Text failed to send" is my favorite, it resumes a great and also stupid thing at the same time !
well written & filled with all the juicy plot details! Very well done!
Brilliant and succinct! So much in here ❤️
Whoaaa, you managed to pack all that into 50 words! You're phenomenal!
That was really well done, one of the best I've seen.
Beautiful 🤩💯🫶🏾‼️
Baz Luhrman could not have said it better.
Wow, that was a lot info packed in there. Great review, Dana.
The Hatfields and McCoys saga captivated in 50 words. Well done ❤️ Love it!