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The Apprentice Part II

The Persistence of Causality

By Lamar WigginsPublished 5 months ago โ€ข Updated 5 months ago โ€ข 4 min read
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The original story was written for the Mathew Fromm High fantasy โ€” Flash Fiction challenge. Catch up with the first chapter here. I felt this story could go much further, and after reading some of the comments, some of the readers felt the same in a roundabout way. Well, it's time to find out what happens to Draden. Please enjoy!

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Bralfir is saddened by the mis-guided choices of Draden. Seven long years were invested in mentoring the academics of a promising fledgling. He's watched him grow from a boy into a man and feels greatly responsible for his well-being. But Draden revealed a side not easily forgiven. The assembly has barred him from any activity within the apprentice conservatory.

Bralfir calls upon Pygmid, a small, hybrid animal likened to an orc-fairy, classified to the order of Santrians. They are known for their loyalty and possess unparalleled tracking skills. He sends the pint-sized, playful one to locate Draden.

It takes Pygmid all but a sliver of the sundial to find him squatting by a tranquil stream, drinking from it and scrubbing his soiled smock against the bedrock. Pygmid idolizes Draden and doesn't fully understand the trouble he's caused. He is overjoyed to see him.

"Pygmid, my friend! What brings you to me! Wait! Do you come alone?"

Draden becomes paranoid. He draws his sword and begins scanning the surrounding brush. Pygmid doesn't speak but understands the native tongue. He answers only to yes and no questions.

"I'll ask you again, do you come alone?"

Pygmid smiles and nods yes. Draden draws back his defenses and returns the sword.

"Was it Bralfir who sent you?"

He anxiously nods yes as he lands on a large, oak stump beside Draden; their smiles come naturally. Draden closes the gap between them and pets his head which triggers the Santrian's wings to flitter through many bright hues, signifying love.

"Does Bralfir wish of my return?"

Pygmid frowns and shakes his head no. The flashy wings return to normal.

"Blast it! Then what the devil does he want? Our minds have clashed! There are no speaking terms between us! None of them have faith in me and treat me as if I'm...I'm some sort of weak child. Although my actions were harsh, I feel justified. The Emerald Chalice is not meant to be shared! Do you agree with me, my friend?"

Pygmid makes a long face and shakes his head no.

"Dratz! what does a mute Santrian know anyway... Would you please do me a favor, kind one? I promise you a hoard of lavender upon your return!"

Pygmid springs into the air in gleeful agreement. He adores lavender and would consume it all day if it were up to him. He clumsily lands on Draden's shoulder and pulls at his hair to regain balance.

"Easy there, little one... All you must do is fetch me the book of Wedowin. I hid it behind a loose plank in the walls of my chambers. Please bring it to me at once. You must do this in secret! The elders are a bit cranky; they don't concur... do you understand?

Pygmid hastily nods yes. He hovers in place and reaches in a satchel attached to his hip to retrieve a folded scroll Bralfir gave him. He hands it to Draden. Full of excitement for his luscious reward, he begins his flight back to the Tortian fortress in the heart of Callista.

Draden curiously unfolds the scroll. It's a message from Bralfir. He reacts with a dismissive smirk but is eager to read it.

My Son, your actions are not acceptable. I blame myself for not acknowledging your need to be heard and understood. I forgive you. The assembly wishes punishment for your behavior. My words in your honor remain a topic of dispute. But! I deliver you great news! In the days since your departure, I have gained another word in the sequence. I long for you to redeem yourself by continuing your work with the Chalice. If you can agree that one man shall not use its' power for selfish purposes, the assembly will strongly consider reinstating your credentials. For my loyalty, I will give you that word. Learn how to speak it correctly first before you combine it with the others. Go forth with your lessons, my son. We shall meet soon. ***********************Flezeric-Eeclecks***********************

Draden studies the word and begins to sound it out. After a few moments, he is confident with his pronunciation. He shouts the words...

"Flezeric-Eeclecks!"

His feet become cemented in the dirt. He tries to manually lift them with his hands to no avail. Fog seeps upward from the ground in thin lines within his immediate vicinity. They solidify into a bronze, doorless cage that surrounds him. Once he is enclosed behind the bars, his feet become unglued. It was a mendacious trick.

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Lamar Wiggins

Creative writer in the Northeast US who loves the paranormal, mystery, true crime, horror, humor, fantasy and poetry. Take a chance, you'll be thoroughly entertained.

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  • noor2 months ago

    wow... toward 3rd part i cant wait to read

  • Babs Iverson3 months ago

    Wonderful storytelling!!! Fantastically written!!! Loved it!!!โค๏ธโค๏ธ๐Ÿ’•

  • Novel Allen4 months ago

    You have a gift Lamar. I concur with D, Alexandra's thoughts below, and Andrew's advice is helpful too, this flows naturally for you. Vocal is addictive, but applying your mind and compartmentalizing your time may help. I just try to go a day or two now just staying away and concentrating on myself. It always pulls you back though. That book is the dream of us all, few of us will see it reach fruition. Part 3 awaits.

  • Donna Fox (HKB)5 months ago

    Wow Lamar, this was just as good as the first one if not better!! It was engaging and such a great read! Love the bit of a cliff hanger you left us in!! I'm off to part 3 now!! ๐Ÿ˜

  • Andrew C McDonald5 months ago

    I like the story; however, your phrasing makes it read like a script. Example: โ€˜Draden becomes paranoid. He draws his sword and begins scanning the surrounding brush.โ€™ It sounds like a playwright describing the scene/setting rather than a story. Perhaps it should be more like โ€ฆ โ€˜Paranoia flooded Dradenโ€™s blood with adrenaline. Drawing his sword, he scanned the surrounding brush for any signs of danger.โ€™ This tense is throughout the story and it tends to distance the reader rather than draw him in. No offense intended. Just a touch of well meaning advice.

  • โœ๏ธ So many jewels are here, ready to shine anew as your story continues... "Bralfir calls upon Pygmid, a small, hybrid animal likened to an orc-fairy, classified to the order of Santrians." "All you must do is fetch me the book of Wedowin. I hid it behind a loose plank in the walls of my chambers." I am curious, have you ever envisioned yourself being an author and publishing a book??? You are building a strong following on Vocal. I can easily see you world-building with this story line. Hmmm... we shall see! โœ๏ธ๐Ÿ‘โœ๏ธ

  • JBaz5 months ago

    When you put all your stories together and make a book ..PLEASE let me know. I will purchase a copy.

  • Berry Driven5 months ago

    Wow, I'm going to go read the first one. I gotta know what he did with the Chalice that got him in so much trouble. What a great new world I've jumped into. Can't wait for the next part.

  • Omggggg, he's trapped now! He shouldn't have said that word! Also, I love Pygmid sooooooo much! ๐Ÿ˜๐Ÿ˜๐Ÿ˜๐Ÿ˜๐Ÿ˜

  • Dana Stewart5 months ago

    You and these cliffhangers! Lol. Youโ€™ve built a world Lamar. Fantasy is so hard for me and you make it seem so effortless. Iโ€™m watching for Part 3!

  • Veronica Coldiron5 months ago

    OmGOSH you need to create a video game of this!! LOVE it!

  • Ooo, that level of trust is going to be difficult to reestablish! Great continuation, Lamar!

  • Matthew Fromm5 months ago

    I love that this has spawned a series. consider me invested.

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