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The Apprentice

A Consequence of Confluence.

By Lamar WigginsPublished 3 months ago Updated 2 months ago 2 min read
Top Story - September 2023
Emerald Chalice Dall-E

Written for the Matthew Fromm High Fantasy Challenge (500-word limit). Win prizes!!! Find all the details here.


He who possesses the Emerald Chalice shall inherit the elements...


Alchemists are baffled by the cryptic Plaques of Wedowin. Made of Umblee scales, these archaic tablets have eluded every attempt to decipher their antiquated script.

Draden, a wayward apprentice, discovers a technique that grants him the first three words. When spoken, the sky bleeds green for a fraction of time. Five crucial words remain obscurant, without them his efforts are futile.

He paces the stone balcony dreaming of the latent powers he will claim. He looks to the sky and begins counting stars.

"What troubles you, my son?" Bralfir, an elder of the Tortian assembly asks as he slowly walks toward the engrossed young man.

"Nothing, sir. I was counting stars in the heavens."

"Never in fifty cycles can one map the sky. You best finish your chores. Tomorrow is but a click away."

Draden's mind is bubbling over. His perseverance reeks of selfish intentions.

"What if I told you, my lord... I have solved part of the script."

"What script do you speak of ...wait, the Emerald Chalice implores your attention. It ranks among the most difficult tasks for the likes of any conjurer. You best stick to your rudimentary lessons before graduating to such a daunting enterprise."

Draden is perturbed by the blatant underestimation.

“Lord Bralfir, I kid you not! The Chalice is real, it will be mine... Forgive me, it will be ours... Behold the unimaginable!”

Draden returns to the edge of the balcony overlooking the Umblee caves and shouts the words of the Chalice.

Karthec lassim orotorix!”

A sonic boom thrashes the chasm, followed by a single cloud that quickly materializes above the tree line. It swirls and transforms from white to a glowing green. The makes of a large cyclone appears and then it’s all gone. Bralfir is astounded but gazes forth with contempt.

“Son! This is both miraculous and damning! We don’t harbor secrets amongst us!”

“My lord, this is no secret. I simply unriddled a task that no one could seem to fathom. The answer lies in the stars, the constellations. The Chalice is not the doing of powerful sorcerers. It was gifted to Callista's realm by master architects from another time and place. They’ve hidden clues in the constellations. Five more words are pivotal in breaking the code. Will you, alone, help me?”

“No... we must consult the assembly at once!”

Bralfir turns and walks toward the entrance. Draden swiftly walks up behind him.

“Sir, I can’t allow you to do that!”

He wraps a rope around the elder’s neck and begins to strangle him. Bralfir briefly struggles, then strikes his staff to the ground three times and vanishes. The rope falls to the polished stone. Draden hurdles the balcony’s ledge and uses rugged tever vines to climb down. He escapes into the Cinquet Forrest and can never return.

It’s imperative he solve the script before the collective efforts of the assembly. He never intended to share the chalice.

Draden Dall-E

Part II - The Persistence of Causality

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About the Creator

Lamar Wiggins

Creative writer in the Northeast US who loves the paranormal, fiction, mystery, articles and the occasional poem. Take a chance, you'll be thoroughly entertained.

"Life is Love Experienced" -LW


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  • EMF11 days ago

    Like it 👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻

  • The Invisible Writerabout a month ago

    Great work. A beginning that leaves you wondering what will come next. This story really peaked my interest

  • Kale Bender2 months ago

    Incredible storytelling!

  • StoryholicFinds2 months ago

    love it! ❤️

  • Nessy Writer2 months ago

    Excellent attention to detail here! Well done

  • Novel Allen2 months ago

    Just discovering this wonderful geeky life simmering under spells and what nots. This fascinating....on to part two. Our hero is alone in his quest, Interesting indeed. TS yeah....

  • J. S. Wade2 months ago

    Magnificent Lamar! The action interlaced with your narrative is finely balanced. Great writing. 😎

  • Thavien Yliaster2 months ago

    This reminds me of the hourglass from "Dragonlance: The Series." In which two gods and a goddess try to find the people that want to use the power of the hourglass for their own selfishness in the efforts of seeing all of time and controlling their own destiny and fate, extending that to others as well. They see three faces in the hourglass upon inspection and rush right in, but are now trapped as they're falling into the hourglass' eternity. They saw their own reflections. Draden may know the three words, but he may not know of the effects if he speaks of any of the rest without completion. The assembly might lose people trying to decipher the phrase. Like a bunch of hackers running a random series of passwords, the others might just try to get the phrase right, that is if Bralfir remembers the first three words and their correct pronunciation. Somebody might turn into moss, another could be converted to emerald, another might dissipate in a ball of light. When it comes to such trial and error, especially for those that practice, they could do more damage to themselves than they potentially could to the surrounding environment. Wouldn't surprise me if one was transported between the space between Callista's realm and that of the master architects. I do wonder how they'll go about doing test trials of the experiments to find the right phrases? Possessed mice, prisoners, ex convicts?

  • Berry Driven2 months ago

    Yup, now that I have read this I understand what happens next. What an amazing story. Love the details of this new world. Can't wait for part 3.

  • Amelia Moore2 months ago

    really interesting and well done, nice work!

  • Donna Fox (HKB)3 months ago

    This was such a great read Lamar!! I like the plot and lore that you have created, I'm drawn in and wanting more!

  • Dana Stewart3 months ago

    You're great with the fantasy genre! Belated Congrats on the Top Story!

  • Naveed3 months ago

    Congratulations on Top Story!!!♥️♥️💕

  • Heather Hubler3 months ago

    Oh man!! I need to know what happens next. That started off on the ground running and didn't stop! I loved the premise. What an enjoyable read :) Congrats on Top Story!!

  • Gerald Holmes3 months ago

    This is great Story-telling. It flows perfectly. Congrats on a well deserved Top Story.

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  • Dean F. Hardy3 months ago

    Really solid entry Lamar. Fantasy suits your writing. Congrats on TS.

  • Very good

  • Stephanie Hoogstad3 months ago

    Great story! I like the use of present tense, as well as the selfish protagonist. The latter really adds another layer to the moral complexity of such a short story. Congrats on the Top Story!

  • Donna Renee3 months ago

    Congrats on the Top Story!! This one was really excellent! ☺️

  • JBaz3 months ago

    What a great story in so few words, Masterful. (I have never used that word in a comment section before) Congratulations

  • Matthew Fromm3 months ago

    Congrats on the top story!

  • Cathy holmes3 months ago

    Great story. Congrats on the TS.

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