Winter Trees
An Experiment in Personification of Nature
As a writer with an old-school education, I try to employ the elements of good poetry - when I can remember them. This short example below was originally published on another site as a challenge to myself, strictly for fun.
The idea was to create a very short, rhyming piece, incorporating a few "tricks of the trade", about the first thing I saw when I looked out the window.
Brittle bones of countless, fragile fingers
Beckoning an all-too-distant sun
Bejeweled by the morning rain that lingers
Frozen, crystal clear upon each one
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Stripped so recently of Autumn's glory,
Naked to the cruel, assailing wind,
They beg the gods to end the winter's story
And dress them in profusion once again.
About the Creator
Dana Crandell
Dad, Stedpad, Grandpa, Husband, lover of Nature and dogs.
Writer, Editor, Photographer and Tech/Internet nerd. Content writer by trade. Vocal Creator by choice.
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Wow Dana, this was hauntingly beautiful! I am breath taken and literally sitting in awe of the mastery I am witnessing. I'll be returning to you page for more soon!
The iambic rhythm here is so perfect, especially in the last stanza. It’s such a satisfying read, I had to reread it to get the full impression. Love when poems demand a second look like this. Great job! 👏
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Taking a minute with the last line, which echoes such tranquility. Love it ❤️
That's beautiful Dana, though I'd rather like to think the trees are enjoying their rest. According to Suzanne Simard's research we might just be able to ask them someday- that would be pretty cool. I really like your use of consonance; it seems to be underused nowadays don't you think?
This painted an amazing picture. Great job with the structure and rhymes
nice
Impressive
A beautiful poem - Anneliese
Just beautiful Dana! Now, whenever I see branches encased in ice (which I absolutely love) I'll remember your poem! ❄️🙂
Nature poetry is my favorite. This is beautiful.
Very few poems I've read on here have stirred something in me, but this one did... Really very beautiful and gently piercing- my favorite kind of poem.
This is gorgeous! 😍 I felt the longing of the branches for the sun. The first line is stunning and so powerful! Well done :)