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When you finally go back to your old home, you find it wasn't the old home you missed but your childhood.

JBaz Twisted Quote Unofficial Challenge-

By Dana CrandellPublished 2 years ago • Updated 2 years ago • 1 min read
When you finally go back to your old home, you find it wasn't the old home you missed but your childhood.
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When love was dropped and shattered

And my poor heart lost to me

I returned, bruised and battered

To where my home used to be

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I found but shards and slivers

Of the child I used to be.

He whines and shits and shivers

And is of no use to me!

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Quote citation: ~Sam Ewing

Yeah, I went all sicko. I also decided to try a new poetic form and came up with an odd one. It's an Irish form, called "Ae Freislighe". So, I says to me self, "I've got Irish blood in me veins, so..." Here's the structure, as I understand it:

Quatrain stanzas of 7 syllables per line.

The last 3 syllabyes of lines 1 and 3 rhyme. (xxa)

The last 2 sylllables of lines 2 and 4 rhyme. (xa)

The number of stanzas can apparently be anywhere from 1 to infinity.

I don't know how badly I've butchered it, but I'm sure my ancestors are rolling in their graves.

Here's the resource I found:

And here's a link to the Challenge (Thanks, JBaz):

Thanks for reading!

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Dana Crandell

Dad, Stepdad, Grandpa, Husband, lover of Nature and dogs.

Poet, Writer, Editor, Photographer, Artist

My poetry collection: Life, Love & Ludicrosity

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    Written by Dana Crandell