They Were Mountain People
a haiku
her first time on skis
she watched him go down whistling
then followed, for life.
About the Creator
Dane BH
By day, I'm a cog in the nonprofit machine, and poet. By night, I'm a creature of the internet. My soul is a grumpy cat who'd rather be sleeping.
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Reader insights
Outstanding
Excellent work. Looking forward to reading more!
Top insights
Compelling and original writing
Creative use of language & vocab
Easy to read and follow
Well-structured & engaging content
Excellent storytelling
Original narrative & well developed characters
Heartfelt and relatable
The story invoked strong personal emotions
- Runner-Up in Get Comfortable Challenge
In The Blink of Her Eye
Time itself bent and morphed, allowing Shannon the precious seconds needed to see and adjust to the disaster unfolding in front of her. Each frame showed minute details she would have missed had the clock not slowed down until she heard every click of the hands as they swept toward the end of everything. If only she was being melodramatic...
By Lisa VanGalen3 days ago in Fiction
Comments (13)
Aww, This was so sweet! 🥲 Congrats on your win!
Congratulations on win. Loved your take on the challenge.
heartwarming <3
Very nice job! If you don’t mind my asking, were they your parents (the subjects of the picture and haiku, that is)?
A wonderful haiku - love how it tells a complete life story in just such a short space.
Great Haiku! Congratulations!
This was a really cool poem! Congrats on your win!
Lovely haiku and made me smile. Congratulations on bringing home the prize.
Congrats!
WOW... Beautifully written. Congratulations Dane :)
Congratulations!! This is a lovely haiku, thank you for sharing it with us <3
Very cool high-ku! Congratulations on your well earned second place finish!
This is beautiful!