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their attractive empty promises

Search/fight for "the real Paul" - Poem inspired of an old Poppy's Prompts

By Paul StewartPublished 2 months ago 1 min read
their attractive empty promises
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Sc r e w e d

without (hope)

Shots fired

oo o oo o

by life and vice

leave b l e e d i n g

bullet holes

o oo oo o

o o z i n g and s e e p i n g


as the lies I've told

good, bad, ugly

white, black, red

all stacked-up|against|me


one by one by one

like (Babushka dolls)

one by one by one


- 2 am -


if I'm "the real Paul"

or the fantastical version of myself?



if I'm the screw-up

or the hard-done-by-saint (I'm not)

I (invented?) long ago?


When I b l e w seeds of doubt

into everyone's lungs

like seeds of dandelions

oo o o oo

one by one by one

)choking( them out

one by one by one


before they can remember

the other "me"


where is my hope for regrowth?

not in the pixels

not on the path of least resistance


facing demons and ignoring...

ignoring their attractive, empty promises


Thanks for reading!

Author's Notes: Another unpublished cast-off from one of Poppy's Prompts from a few months ago. The subject matter is something that is at the forefront of my mind right now as I am finally trying to work on my problems rather than just staying clean. Anyway. Ta-da.

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About the Creator

Paul Stewart

Scottish-Italian poet/writer from Glasgow.

Overflowing in English language torture and word abuse.

"Every man has a sane spot somewhere" R.L Stevenson

The Accidental Poet - Poetry Collection is now available!


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    Creative use of language & vocab

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  • ThatWriterWoman2 months ago

    The description of the dandelion seeds is phenomenal writing Paul! Nicely done!

  • Michelle Liew2 months ago

    Felt as though I was in your head, Paul. Well done. And we're with you.

  • I loved how this read. The way you wrote this created a real sense of tension. Awesome!

  • This was so good Paul. I am so glad to be in such good company...whatever Paul you become; we will be better for knowing each aspect.

  • C. Rommial Butler2 months ago

    Well-wrought! Remember also that they will try to use your past against you as well, to make you think you can never change. Are they real demons or just aspects of yourself? Does it matter? Heed not their disgusting, contemptible voices, but rather that of the river of Eden which flows from your very own heart. Many blessing and much love, brother!

  • Belle2 months ago

    (Top Story content!!)

  • Belle2 months ago

    Beautiful! The use of the italics and other functions made it absolutely crazy to read. Felt on my toes the whole time, like I should be looking over my shoulder at something watching me. Perhaps a past version of myself. Uncanny!!

  • D. J. Reddall2 months ago

    Identity can be as ephemeral as dandelion seeds--a compellingly unorthodox poem!

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