The Sensations of Nothingness
finding peace in a float tank
mind churns
body aches
~
strip down
shower off
earplugs in
door open
step over
door shut
slide through
settle deep
lights out
dark falls
waves dissipate
water settles
~
bones s-t-r-e-t-c-h
heart slows
gravity melts
spirit rests
chaos fades
universe hums
~
mind stills
body heals
About the Creator
Donna Renee
Hi! Thanks for reading! My hobbies include making coffee, drinking coffee, and starting to write a story and then rage-deleting it when I get the slightest bit frustrated.
Work in Progress: WOWH, cozy mystery (paranormal elements)
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Comments (69)
Wicked! Never been in one. ☺️
Beautiful 🥰
There is a reason this was top story. Enchanting 🥰
I love that I feel your words, I love this 🫶
Very powerful and to the point. Love it. 👏🏼👏🏼
Simple and elegant and true!
Congratulation on your Top Story. Well deserved for this simple but so well crafted poem!💙Anneliese
Excellent imagery Donna! Intriguing experience. Congratulations! 🥇🥂
Wow, now that made me want to try this. But maybe I don't need to, the words you chose, they actually made me relax for a moment. That was true wordsmithery!
Very nice
Excellent work
slick poem. tight images!
Congratulations on Top Story! I felt each line of this sink into my bones. Gravity melts just got me. Loved it!
Simple words but deep meaning
Amazing,,poetry syntax attract me!Congratulations on your top story!
Oh wow this was so good Donna you really nailed this!!!
I knew this would be Top Story… but I would’ve added it to my Freshly Picked this week if it wasn’t. 🥂
Congrats on the top story!
Check it out guys you will love it https://vocal.media/poets/winter-nights-qu1ts0fth
That's lovely, Donna!!! Congratulations on T S too!!!
Yayyyyy congratulations on your Top Story! 🎉💖🎊🎉💖🎊
I loved this quick journey that ended with a relaxing calmness. What a great concept for the challenge. Sensory deprivation ...clever!
Awesome poem, Donna! Floating is the best!!! I love a good float sesh, but I've only ever done it in the open water—I've considered the tanks but I'm worried I'll get too claustrophobic.
Ooooh love this! It feels very dynamic
congrats on a well deserved TS!