She loved me
In ways...
She loved me in ways, I couldn't explain
in ways I could only experience
She carried me away in moments, I couldn't believe
in moments I could only participate in
~
She stirred an ocean, inside me
in whirlwinds of typhoons, swirling
inside an intimate storm
I got swept away in
~
She weaved mysteries, inside my soul
to solve them inside my heart
She whispered secrets, inside my thoughts
to catch electric butterflies
inside my stomach
~
Her hands danced like feathers
floating over my skin
Her eyes read like sonnets
strumming over my heartstrings
~
A kiss pressed from her lips
and the world was gone
A touch pushed from her hips
and I was gone
~
A heat burned so hot
between us
there was no telling her from me
there was nothing ...only the music
we painted
in notes spread
across a naked canvas
~
As two we became one
beautiful
and, alive
we sang, together
in the dark
~
Rhythms of love, echoed
within our hungry desires
melting us inside flames
glowing bright with passion
Burning us, till we ran out of breath
~
Arms wrapped around arms, we fell
legs curled around legs, we escaped
my words, her words, mingling in circles
her breath, my breath, blending in air
fighting to stay awake
we discovered our truths
in hours walking away from midnight
we drifted off to sleep
fading into each other
dreaming alone together
in fairy~tale dreamscapes
~
Morning was a surprise
of sunlight
pouring in from a window
her body was a blanket
stretching over me
her love was a home
spreading into my rooms
~
Lying beside her in bed
feeling flutters of her inside my chest
listening to her breath across my shoulder
wishing I could live in her space
forever
~
I thought, rhetorically
she was
heaven, inside a moment.
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Comments (54)
This was wonderful. Masterful way with words.
I really enjoyed this, specifically your ability to use descriptive language that played on the senses of the reader. Both enticing and engaging me in a way that was hypnotic in a sense. I found myself lost in the words and sensations you created in my mind! This was so beautifully done! I hung off your every word for this one TIW, it was magical and beautiful! Just like you! 💜
She was heaven inside a moment
Wow, really beautifully written and such amazing imagery!
lovely. how sweet to see a heart spilled across a page like this. :) <3
engaging
Intensely beautiful!
I love that this is written in past tense, it says that time doesn’t heal all wounds or love doesn’t just disappear. Again you manage to express what many wish (including myself) but are unable too.
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Sublime. ❤️
This is a beautifully written and heartfelt poem that truly captures the depth and intensity of love. Your use of vivid imagery and sensory language paints a picture of a passionate and intimate connection between two people. The way you describe the physical and emotional sensations is truly captivating and draws the reader in. Well done!
Loved it! ❤, comment and subbed. looking forward to more
Hearts with one purpose alone Through summer and winter seem Enchanted to a stone
love it 💕
This is a beautiful expression of a deep and intense love that cannot be put into words, but can only be felt and experienced. The imagery of being carried away in moments is powerful and evokes a sense of surrender and trust in the relationship. It captures the essence of being in a love that is beyond explanation, where the only thing that matters is the connection between two people. Well done!
nice
Fantastic lyrics
This was so romantic and wonderful!
Beautiful 🫠
That was so romantic and intimate. Well done!
Wow! Nice poem. Keep it up
That this is written in the past tense is heart-breaking, though if it were in the present tense I fear it might consume us all. Your uncommon juxtaposition of words & images demands that we linger & fully take in their meaning rather than skimming & rushing over them to get to the end. You invite us into the space between the two of you from which neither you nor we can be fully separated. The rhetoric you supply is not one of persuasion for in this we need no persuading. In opening yourself so freely, you have opened to us & invited us into this "heaven inside a moment." Congratulations & thank you for this.
"...she was heaven, inside a moment." Woah! Of all the powerful lines in this poem, this last one impacted me the most. Beautiful and breathtaking. Well done!
So tender, sweet and intimate. This line had me hook, line and sinker: "Her eyes read like sonnets." Congratulations on Top Story!
What a beautiful and heartfelt piece of writing! It's clear that this person meant a great deal to you, and your words really conveyed the depth of your love for them. Your use of metaphors and imagery was particularly effective, creating a vivid and emotional picture of your relationship. I hope that writing this helped you to process your feelings and that you continue to find comfort and solace in your memories of this person. Thank you for sharing your work with us.