Don't think about how this opening line lacks any
Imagistic or impressive properties. It is on the nose: a distraction,
Shorthand or a placeholder waiting to turn metaphorical. Is
This change to occur? I could try, of course, and take pleasant
Road-trips along the connections my brain affords me. For
An example: drafting the line as relating to procrastinators,
Circumventing blame or judgement through peaceful comparisons like
The last ice cube in a drink, waiting to somehow dissolve, granting me
In its miniscule, lingering existence amusement as it skates and
Orients itself around and around the meniscus's surface before, perhaps,
Needling activity. Yet, I'll forget to change the line (myself) for me or you.
About the Creator
Hello! I'm mostly a writer of fiction and poetry that tend to involve nature, family, and the idea of growth at the moment. Otherwise, I'm a reader, crafter, and full-time procrastinator!
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