Don't think about how this opening line lacks any
Imagistic or impressive properties. It is on the nose: a distraction,
Shorthand or a placeholder waiting to turn metaphorical. Is
This change to occur? I could try, of course, and take pleasant
Road-trips along the connections my brain affords me. For
An example: drafting the line as relating to procrastinators,
Circumventing blame or judgement through peaceful comparisons like
The last ice cube in a drink, waiting to somehow dissolve, granting me
In its miniscule, lingering existence amusement as it skates and
Orients itself around and around the meniscus's surface before, perhaps,
Needling activity. Yet, I'll forget to change the line (myself) for me or you.
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Hannah E. Aaron
Hello! I'm mostly a writer of fiction and poetry that tend to involve nature, family, and the idea of growth at the moment. Otherwise, I'm a reader, crafter, and full-time procrastinator!
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Came here from Amanda’s article. Loved your take on this and totally relate 🫣😁
Hey! I just wanted to let you know I featured your piece in my article. <3 https://vocal.media/writers/fantastical-vocal-favorites-vol-1
Have you ever tried to write in meter? You could do iambic pentameter…basically each line would be a study in a low syllable and accented syllable repeated five times a line. I haven’t written in iambs in years, yet there is lasting value in learning. It means basically looking up each word you use in the dictionary and seeing where the stress lay. Then you build your lines accordingly to the iambs.
Oh my gosh that opening line hooked me right away!! As a fellow procrastinator this resonated deeply. 😅
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