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Seeing the Sea

"Paul's Unofficial Remix Challenge

By Shirley BelkPublished 22 days ago 1 min read
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https://mcintyrebirds.blogspot.com/2011/02/little-gull-in-port-aransas-215.html

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Oh, the warm breeze of the Gulf lulls me as the sun leaves tiny kisses

on my face...makes me feel it deep down, no part of me it misses.

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My bed of beige sand begs for me to be a child again on this relaxing day,

But I am too busy listening to what the little gulls might have to say...

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I feel so very small and insecure against the majesty of this inlet.

Oh, that I could send away all burden of my wrongs and my regret.

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I think of all the seasons, memories, and occasions that God sent my way.

Have I done my best to live them fully, or have I let them slip away?

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The beach becomes a spiritual mirror of which I must peer,

It begs me to take this journey forward, in His love, without fear.

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As the waves go back and forth, He commands, "No further."

He is my God, and I should have no other!

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I've replaced my ugly burdens with a bucket and a shovel..

Now I'm free to build a castle instead of my small hovel!

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nature poetryMental HealthinspirationalGratitude
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About the Creator

Shirley Belk

Mother, Nana, Sister, Cousin, & Aunt who recently retired. RN (Nursing Instructor) who loves to write stories to heal herself and reflect on all the silver linings she has been blessed with

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  • Staringale19 days ago

    There is a sense of introspection and reflection in this poem. It gives off a message to the reader to let go of their burdens, fears and embrace the beauty of the present moment.

  • Rowan Finley 20 days ago

    My FAVORITE line is: "My bed of beige sand begs for me to be a child again on this relaxing day." This line is absolutely heart turning and gorgeous!

  • Lamar Wiggins20 days ago

    Clever and powerful remix, Shirley. Loved it!

  • Babs Iverson21 days ago

    Love your gratitude poem!!!💕❤️❤️

  • This was extremely powerful and profound! You produced a megamasterpiece out of Paul's masterpiece! Loved your poem!

  • Andrea Corwin 21 days ago

    Aww, love this!! Clever.

  • Novel Allen22 days ago

    I never saw this challenge.. .but I love it. I love the ending about building a castle, yet give praise to the hovel for bringing you to the castle. In everything we give thanks. Lovely poem.

  • L.C. Schäfer22 days ago

    This is lovely, I especially like this bit: The beach becomes a spiritual mirror 😁

  • Paul Stewart22 days ago

    Oh this is all kinds of magical and beautiful. Love how you took my poem and gave an insight into your own views on the sea and its profound meaning for you. Exceptional. Every single line was just perfect. Thank you for entering and thank you for putting forward such an incredible piece, Shirley! :)

  • This is absolutely one of your best Shirley. Outstanding work!!! 💜🩷💙

  • Hannah Moore22 days ago

    And yet....the house built on sand is doomed!

  • Well said… the sea seems to have a profound effect on many of us.

  • angela hepworth22 days ago

    gorgeous work! what i would give to be in the ocean right about now…

  • Rachel Deeming22 days ago

    This is lovely, Shirley. Who doesn't love the sea?

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