Relief
An idiotic attempt to overload the Eclipse acrostic, interweaving three further acrostic requirements as the moon passes the sun. Why, Hannah, why?
Ever pure and Steady, moon’s Midnight monochrome gleaM
Casts shadow Upon creatures Seeking hidden places, in whO
Lights fear, or Nightly lusting, Or living’s always needful echO
In discretion, Moon eclipses sUn, the vivid light of revelatioN
Pointed rays, Observing orb, Opening raw, indelicate secretS
Sacrificing all Only for truth, Naked ache of a grinning milieU
Enacting one Night stilled miNute, sun cedes a beat to mooN
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So clever! Excellent use of milieu!
The layers you added onto this challenge are so impressive!
If only I could be this clever, you have given me a new challenge that I will not be attempting but only wishing I could pull off like you!
I see that you have returned to eclipse us all. Welcome back from hibernation. It is good for the soul. If you count this down it would also fit into the One minute challenge. Cleverly and thought provokingly wonderful.
You deliberately tied both your hands behind your back - poetically speaking - and yet still managed to deliver a beautiful poem with layer upon layer of deeper meaning. I guess if you don't mind tying yourself into a pretzel for art and form's sake, we don't mind reading the results!
Hang on, let me pick my jaw of the floor and find my mind that has been blown away. Hannah, this is like the most magnificent thing is the history of magnificent things! How long did you take to write this?
I’d offer some awed comment but I’m trying to find my jaw back
Well you made the task infinitely more difficult but you absolutely nailed it! Thought this was really clever and beautiful. Nice one.
Very cleverly done, Hannah. I’ve missed your poetry.
OMGSH! This is so clever. I have a hard enough time with the first letters. Thank you for once again, pushing the envelope of creativity
Why, Hannah? Because YOU CAN! This is a work of art. The 3-3-1 structure, the theme of hiding and revealing, and the visual element all align magnificently. (See what I did there?) And "living’s always needful echo" is now one of my favorite metaphors for sleep. Jaw dropping poem!
I'm glad this is the first thing I read today. Subtitle gave me a chuckle, even though I'm not sufficiently caffeinated. The words you weave are beautiful, and those extra acrostic, damn. They may not line up well on they phone, but very clever. And torturous as well, I'm sure. Yeah, Hanna why. Why are you doing this to yourself? Lol. Great job.
Well, my next, soo-to-be-published one is a little harder, but you really went all out on this one. A little crazy, maybe, but clever as hell!
I think the thing I enjoy most about your writing is the feeling it gives me to read your words. I allow myself to not think for a moment and just be with your words. Sit and absorb the vibrations for a while. Lovely turns of phrase here. And I love when we writers challenge ourselves beyond an existing challenge. Rise to the occasion and all... Beautiful work here.
Well, that was clever! Nicely done. Blew my mind a little. I'm off to lie down.
Well now...this is why I love your writing so much...when you let loose and just go all crazy. I love this kinda "why not make it even harder" approach lol. You are such a marvel. And this is splendid...even without all the extra tricksiness. your words are impactful, beautiful and I just love how all of this feels. Hannah, amazing. I could have just said that...but it felt wrong to just say "Hannah, amazing" impolite or impersonal...oh well. I've made up for it by yammering on lol. Well done, The Hannah.