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Pretty Sure

I could have sworn

By Frankie MartinelliPublished 2 months ago 1 min read
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Pretty Sure
Photo by Lindsey Savage on Unsplash

I'm pretty sure I caught the tail end of your perfume

Even though only loneliness exists in this room

Even though I haven't caught a glimpse of you

In a long time

I could have sworn I felt your touch just once

Yes,

I could have sworn it was you

It's a touch you don't reserve for just anyone

I'll lay here thinking that you're mine

I'm pretty sure I caught the tail end of your perfume

Even though only loneliness exists in this room

Even though I haven't caught a glimpse of you

In a long time

Such a long time...

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About the Creator

Frankie Martinelli

Musician.

All work is copyrighted, and is my own.

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  • L.C. Schäfer2 months ago

    Oh, the longing is palpable here ❤️

  • Babs Iverson2 months ago

    Heartwrenching!!! 💕♥️♥️

  • The yearning here was soooo intense! Such a poignant poem! I loved it!!

  • /-\ 5 |-| 3 R2 months ago

    I think this is a great image to work with. Overall this is a strong piece. FWIW, I feel it would benefit from less spelling it out. EG: Even though only loneliness exists in this room. Can you show that vs. telling me that? What makes a room lonely? Describe it in a 10 word sentence that shows me an image and I can immediately say: That feels lonely. This is really strong: "I'm pretty sure I caught the tail end of your perfume " It gives me a great visual and makes me want to follow the narrative instantly. I'm jealous of it. But for me, the rest becomes more telling and loses a bit of that zeal. This is just my POV for please take that as it is.

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