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Oshkabinoojiinh

a poem written for my newborn son

By Jennisea RedfieldPublished about a month ago 1 min read
Top Story - June 2024
Oshkabinoojiinh
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My dear Eragon,

From the water, dark and warm,

there you resided.

Suddenly thrusted into a new air,

Bright, dry and unfamiliar.

I held you to my breast,

Skin to skin.

Nestled under my heart,

Now cradled in my arms.

Hello, my little one.

My tiny bud of a human.

Straight from the earth,

Tiny cries like little birds,

Red face, flower bud mouth.

So small,

No bigger than fresh bread.

A scent so faint,

Nothing but pure.

Tiny hands, feather soft,

no bigger than a dandelion,

Grasping at air,

Reaching for my soft voice

Tiny button eyes,

Closed like little shells,

Too tired and week to see the sun.

Small, uncallused feet,

No bigger than pecans,

Curled toes,

No longer cramped.

I waited for you.

Eager to hold you in the crook of my arm.

My little one,

My infant.

Ni oshkabinoojiinh...

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Comments (16)

  • Dr. Jason Benskin26 days ago

    Congratulations on having your story featured as a top story on Vocal! This is a remarkable achievement, and it's clear why your work has received such recognition. Your storytelling is truly exceptional. The narrative was not only compelling but also beautifully crafted, holding my attention from start to finish. The way you developed the characters and plot was masterful, making the story both engaging and thought-provoking. Your unique voice and perspective shine through, setting your work apart. It’s evident that you poured a lot of passion and effort into this piece, and it has certainly paid off. I look forward to reading more of your incredible stories in the future. Keep up the fantastic work! Best regards, Dr. Jay

  • Dawnxisoul393art28 days ago

    Wonderful, the vivid imagery of the baby's journey from the water to the air, from the womb to your arms, creates a strong sense of connection and wonder, the anticipation and eagerness you express as you waited for this little one to arrive is palpable in your words, we‘re deeply moved by the poem, loved it, and hope to read more of your work, thank you very much again for sharing this spiritual journey that touched our hearts, subscribed.

  • Kingsley Gomes, PhD.about a month ago

    Great poem!!!!

  • Jabir Shooabout a month ago

    Nice Work

  • CHRISTIAN Pabout a month ago

    Beautiful ❤️ piece of work

  • Dharrsheena Raja Segarranabout a month ago

    Back to say congratulations on your Top Story! 🎉💖🎊🎉💖🎊

  • Talia Devoraabout a month ago

    Aaawwweee so sweet! Congrats on the well earned TS!

  • Denise E Lindquistabout a month ago

    Miigwech 💕 Congratulations on well deserved top story!! 😊❤️

  • Andrea Corwin about a month ago

    Congrats on Top Story for this lovely poem 🥳

  • Margaret Brennanabout a month ago

    congratulations on TS. What a wonderful, beautiful tribute to a newborn. Awesome.

  • Gabriela Trofin-Tatárabout a month ago

    So beautiful, a mother's love is the most precious for her little one. Congrats for top story!

  • Ameer Bibiabout a month ago

    Congratulations on TS Love your love for your love ❤

  • ROCK about a month ago

    Congratulations on Top Story!

  • Jabir Shooabout a month ago

    Dudukee.Dudukee.

  • TahimaAniabout a month ago

    So sweet.. Congratulations ♥️

  • Dharrsheena Raja Segarranabout a month ago

    Awww, this was so sweet. Sending you both lots of love and hugs ❤️

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