Oshkabinoojiinh
a poem written for my newborn son
My dear Eragon,
From the water, dark and warm,
there you resided.
Suddenly thrusted into a new air,
Bright, dry and unfamiliar.
I held you to my breast,
Skin to skin.
Nestled under my heart,
Now cradled in my arms.
Hello, my little one.
My tiny bud of a human.
Straight from the earth,
Tiny cries like little birds,
Red face, flower bud mouth.
So small,
No bigger than fresh bread.
A scent so faint,
Nothing but pure.
Tiny hands, feather soft,
no bigger than a dandelion,
Grasping at air,
Reaching for my soft voice
Tiny button eyes,
Closed like little shells,
Too tired and week to see the sun.
Small, uncallused feet,
No bigger than pecans,
Curled toes,
No longer cramped.
I waited for you.
Eager to hold you in the crook of my arm.
My little one,
My infant.
Ni oshkabinoojiinh...
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Wonderful, the vivid imagery of the baby's journey from the water to the air, from the womb to your arms, creates a strong sense of connection and wonder, the anticipation and eagerness you express as you waited for this little one to arrive is palpable in your words, we‘re deeply moved by the poem, loved it, and hope to read more of your work, thank you very much again for sharing this spiritual journey that touched our hearts, subscribed.
Great poem!!!!
Nice Work
Beautiful ❤️ piece of work
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Aaawwweee so sweet! Congrats on the well earned TS!
Miigwech 💕 Congratulations on well deserved top story!! 😊❤️
Congrats on Top Story for this lovely poem 🥳
congratulations on TS. What a wonderful, beautiful tribute to a newborn. Awesome.
So beautiful, a mother's love is the most precious for her little one. Congrats for top story!
Congratulations on TS Love your love for your love ❤
Congratulations on Top Story!
Dudukee.Dudukee.
So sweet.. Congratulations ♥️
Awww, this was so sweet. Sending you both lots of love and hugs ❤️