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Narcissistic Strings

Empathetic Passiveness

By Kelli Sheckler-AmsdenPublished about a month ago Updated about a month ago 1 min read
Top Story - June 2024
Narcissistic Strings
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what does this string do, he smugly asked, as he tugged it even harder

her smile broadened, though her eyes were dark and sad

oh, I see, he grinned with glee, as his hands pulled at another

contorting and controlling how she laughed

his eyebrows raised, his pupils narrowed, he’d never had this kind of power

she sat motionless , responding only to his touch

he pulled the strings making her gasp, though she could not resist or cower

as he, bit by bit, destroyed her in his clutch

a single tear ran down her cheek, he could not control those deep emotions

he collected them in a crystal vase, and with the others, dropped them in the ocean

when those that knew her once, saw her again, they could not believe the notion

he had altered her beyond repair leaving her tangled in his commotion

I’m sorry she cried, that I let you down. I did my best to help him change

he pulled them out, pitched them on the ground. we don’t need these now, he smiled, she’s a puppet without strings

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Comments (35)

  • Rick Henry Christopher 13 days ago

    Wow! That was powerful. To him she had no worth she was just an object for him to manipulate and control. But the one thing he can't control is if she leaves.

  • So tragically accurate of narcissists.

  • Grz Colm29 days ago

    Terrific work on the commentary of your top story Kelli! ☺️👍

  • Christy Munson29 days ago

    Congratulations on Top Story! 🥳

  • Leslie Writes30 days ago

    Damn this is a powerful piece. Felt every line!

  • Margaret Brennanabout a month ago

    WOW. congratulations on TS and I had five years of this kind of relationship and finally broke free. It was truly a nightmare. This is such a blunt reminder that we should never try to control others. Oh, how I love this poem. GREAT writing.

  • Andrea Corwin about a month ago

    Oh, and congrats on Top Story too, well deserved!

  • Andrea Corwin about a month ago

    Yikes, that ending!!

  • Babs Iversonabout a month ago

    Fantastic lines!!! Congratulations on Top Story!!!💕❤️❤️

  • Dr. Jason Benskinabout a month ago

    Congratulations on having your story featured as a top story on Vocal! This is a remarkable achievement, and it's clear why your work has received such recognition. Your storytelling is truly exceptional. The narrative was not only compelling but also beautifully crafted, holding my attention from start to finish. The way you developed the characters and plot was masterful, making the story both engaging and thought-provoking. Your unique voice and perspective shine through, setting your work apart. It’s evident that you poured a lot of passion and effort into this piece, and it has certainly paid off. I look forward to reading more of your incredible stories in the future. Keep up the fantastic work! Best regards, Dr. Jay

  • Lamar Wigginsabout a month ago

    Whoa!!! Great work, Kelli! 'Puppet without strings' gave me one of those a gut-punch, waking moments.

  • shanmuga priyaabout a month ago

    Congratulations on this stunning achievement 🎉

  • Natasha Collazoabout a month ago

    Evocative! Wonderful story telling

  • Dharrsheena Raja Segarranabout a month ago

    Back to say congratulations on your Top Story! 🎉💖🎊🎉💖🎊

  • angela hepworthabout a month ago

    So tragic and poignant!

  • Alexandria Stanwyckabout a month ago

    Congrats on the Top Story! A perfect and heartbreaking way to describe narcissism and its effects.

  • Kristen Balyeatabout a month ago

    Perfectly describes the saddest truth...that ending. Ugh! Great job on this, Kelli, and congrats on the top!

  • Gabriela Trofin-Tatárabout a month ago

    This poem flows so well, superb! Congrats for top story!! 🎉

  • D.K. Shepardabout a month ago

    What a last line of tragic transformation! Congrats on Top Story! Well deserved!

  • Melissa Ingoldsbyabout a month ago

    Damn this is too real and raw amazing work Kelli

  • ROCK about a month ago

    YES! You slammed it Kelli Boo! Top Story! Knew it!

  • Vicki Lawana Trusselli about a month ago

    This is a bitter truth. I have been in narcissistic relationships and they are still horrifying after I left.

  • Dr. Jason Benskinabout a month ago

    Awesome Article Kelli. keep up the good work. This is very devastating.

  • Ameer Bibiabout a month ago

    Hey Kelli, your poem is reflecting a bitter truth in many societies. I have also seen some girls where they their whole control was in hands of their boy friends, or husbands. It is totally loss or damage of ones herself. But some of them even don't realize that they are being played as puppets.

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