My Dear Man
4u
Dear man
I was blooming so fast
I glimmered so green
It was time 4u to make me a sacrifice
So, your power burnt¬ me
And tore me apart
Ꙭ
Then I felt down pieces by pieces
I hated it
I scattered
I wanted it¬ to end
The wind was too strong
Ꙭ
I was fresh and young
As a dear man
You were quick and clever
You knew my eyes were leaves
You therefore sweetly warmed them¬ to straw
And spread them away with a little blast
Ꙭ
I heard them slapping on the ground
And scrabbling on a gravel floor
As the wind lifted them forcefully
I recognized since then¬ your footfall on my eyes
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My eyes
That was why I was worth
My eyes
That was all you thought I was
Ꙭ
Everything was done so gently
I once thought you were him
If he even existed, would he love me like you¬ did?
Then I’d prefer life than love
I sincerely doubt love has a sign though
Ꙭ
Halloween
I was a queen
The young 1’s feared my fallen eyes
But my heart was pure thanks
Given¬
To a dear man
Ꙭ
You think I would be blind
Sacrifice was done
Miracle was given
I have new fresh eyes
But not 4u¬
Sir demon
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Comments (5)
I love that this was so raw and heartfelt. You started off being burned but then got 'new fresh eyes' by the end. Loved it!
This was powerful! I loved it!
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Love it. Thanks
Very nicely done.
Lovely words tinged with sadness