Every heavenly body in the galaxy, every sparkling star
Carries within a tiny reflection
Lit by a vision of you,
In the moonlight on a cloudless night
Pausing, lips pursed in awe.
Some memories lodge themselves so deeply, they
Eclipse the impossible distance between then and now.
About the Creator
John Cox
Family man, grandfather, retired soldier and story teller with an edge.
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Outstanding
Excellent work. Looking forward to reading more!
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Compelling and original writing
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Heartfelt and relatable
The story invoked strong personal emotions
Two Wrinkles In Time
It is pointless to run, my darling, because sixty seconds ago, I will kill you. My blade will have sliced reality open right in front of you. It will have first pierced it as it would a bed sheet left hanging to dry, flapping in the wind on a Sunday afternoon. But the metal will have drawn a line in the air that the ghostly tear will have followed. Then I, La Dyablès, machete firmly in hand, will have emerged from what your mind, at the time, could only interpret as the other side of here—whatever that means to you. I know. I have seen that look on the faces of countless unlucky… clients. You will not have been the first nor the last to try and reneg on a riches for soul contract only to present this visage to me when I come to collect.
By Lily Séjor7 days ago in Fiction
Comments (16)
Back to say congratulations on your leader board placement
I feel the love and devotion!!
I love the scenery it paints in the mind of the reader. It kind of makes me want to dream again.
So, so beautiful, John. I'm lost for words!
This was, as the kids say these days, All the feels. I'm pretty sure they say something like that. Probably.
Awww, this was so sweet and lovely! Such a wonderful Acrostic!
Your last line is wonderful: 'Eclipse the impossible distance between then and now.'
John, this is just glorious. Such a lovely poem. It has made my heart swell.
oh, my hats off to you, Mr Cox. All of them. What a beautiful love letter/serenade to your good lady! What a gorgeous piece to slide in during the closing hours of the challenge too! Well done, sir! Exquisite!
This is a spectacular love letter.
Wow! I'm impressed! Loved your poem🫶
Lovely and so heartfelt. Great entry.
So beautiful, John, my talented friend. You really capture the enormity and mystery of love and our human need to belong to the universe while meeting the challenge parameters.
Oh, what a poet you are, John!!
Wow! This is so stunningly beautiful and pure! There have been so many amazing eclipse acrostics but this one is really something special! I’ve already read it four times and I can’t get enough! The balance of simple particulars and incredible emotional weight is magical. I was about to stop reading tonight right before I saw this notification and I’m so glad I didn’t! Just wonderful, John!
Beautifully poetic, John! Way to get this last-minute entry in there. It's definitely a contender!