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j'ai perdu mon corps
spellchecked; equipped with a foreword
I wrote this strange poem (which is presented below), slept on it, and realized that my French grammar is lame (many thanks to Cendrine Marrouat)—though I would call it more of a typo; my French grammar is doing alright (or rather its absence (only for the time being; am learning, am I?)). What I also realized was that this poem is a(n) (almost) direct continuation to events described in yet another poem I wrote some time ago (and it's nothing but a coincidence):
Furthermore, I highly recommend the animated film I allude to in the poem's title. It won the Nespresso Grand Prize in the International Critics' Week section at the 2019 Cannes Film Festival, and it indeed is amazing. The animation, the soundtrack, the idea, and the surrealistic, existentialistic energy it emanates. By the way, the film is based on a book.
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now i watch my head soar
in the air as though
it's a chinese lantern
and there's so much gore
i want to vomit but i can't.
the dribbling blood creates a mysterious pattern
on the floor. I'm afraid
to lose it all and faint;
unconsсious, my head
would dribble on the floor
and rock and roll.
meanwhile, my body,
a lifeless breathless doll,
turns blue and starts to decompose
i hope it'll serve as compost
for some hypothetical rose
or as dinner to a bear
i'm fine with both
and honestly, i do not care
this poem is gross
but i don't care
i lost my body, i am experiencing stress,
stress in excess:
at work, at home.
and now i have this gruesome syndrome:
i lost my head,
pardon, my bad,
i lost my body.
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Comments (9)
This is unusual and terrifying! It strikes me a lot, and I don't know why, it's a bit disturbing, but I can't help but read, maybe it's a bit ironic, anyway, many compliments, I find it really original! 😮
Still a great poem. The leaps and bounds you have made in your French in only the space of a day astounds me.
This strongly reminds me of another poem I read of yours just recently! This one totally surpasses that one though both in scope and the evident intricacies of the French language! 😅 Making myself laugh at how TERRIBLY unfunny I am being! Apologies.
It's always in the last place you look. Ha, ha. Anyway, it is an interesting piece of work here. Let me see more of the gore in you... ;)
Hahahahahahahahaha I freaking loved this! Gore and blood are my favourite!
And all that goes with it. I hear ya, man.
Cool little poem! Is this a metaphor? Or more surreal? And are those Lego people in the picture? Hahah - love it ! I haven’t heard of that film in the title but do enjoy French cinema.
That really did spill it out all over the floor. Pretty disembodied poetry! "i hope it'll serve as compost for some hypothetical rose or as dinner to a bear i'm fine with both"
Wow, that was quite powerful! Well done! By the way, it's "J'ai perdu mon corps" in French. ;-)