Illegible Minds
A Sonnet
Had you gazed at your own, scaly image
And recognized yourself in that dark pool
You might have inaugurated an age
In which others submitted to your rule
Consciousness seems present in all life forms
However crude or shallow in some minds;
Awareness of awareness breaks these norms
And spawns thoughts of radically new kinds
You and your ancient brethren could give signs
By means of grunts or cries or roars mighty
But symbols live between these simple lines
And form languages, crude as they might be
Had you learned to tell your own, strange story
It could have preserved your fleeting glory
About the Creator
D. J. Reddall
I write because my time is limited and my imagination is not.
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Emaciated arms covered by the tiniest bit of flesh capture me, holding me close to its decaying form. Gnarled and thin fingers pull my dark hair. Screams of anguish surround me, somehow reverberating from the empty chasm. I punch and watch as bits of grey flesh disintegrate into dust. Scratching at the caverns where its eyes should have been, I could only hope for an end to this hell. The sounds of torment continued, assaulting my ears with one tremendous roar.
By Isabella Roseabout 21 hours ago in Horror
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This is excellent D.J., and so cleverly constructed! I really like “Awareness of awareness breaks these norms”, and your musings on dinosaurs and their inability to break through when communicating. Thoughtful and it also flows nicely🤗
Oh it would be so nice of the dinosaurs were able to write down all the details of their lives! Loved your poem!
This is amazing. Your choice of vocabulary and forms of portraying the message are creative and beautifully woven.
Such a great story it would be to tell. Still Jurassic Park speaks well for them. We get the gist. Well said.
This is superb. I love to think about what the dinosaurs could have thought about and what their consciousness looked like. Great poem!
nice gut punch at the end there.
Last two lines are superb!