They stood upon their battlefield, pistols poised and drawn
One to earn the name of fame, the other dying here at dawn
She'd never understood his ways, his need to shoot through life
And though he knew he'd loved her well, he'd never call her wife.
Now he's running from the law, his shadow on the plain
Running away from all he's known, gunslinger in the rain.
He'd done the best that he knew how, knowing that he'd been right.
Somehow she'd have to understand, gunslingers had to fight!
Standing on an empty street, the reins still in his hand
Hat brim strained against the wind, he'd dared to take his stand.
Baptized in the pouring rain, he held his hat upright
Waving it to her empty window, he faded from the light
Now he's running from the law, his shadow on the plain
Running away from that woman he loves, gunslinger's life is pain!
He'd done the best that he knew how, praying that he'd been right
Someday he hoped she could understand. He was born to fight!
Always running from himself, a mere shadow among men,
Fated to travel into the dark, again, and again... and again.
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Veronica Coldiron
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I love the story you tell with this piece, and how you captured the feel of old westerns. You also selected great images to help convey the story. Well done!
This is such a powerful story poem; to me, it speaks of two people who love each other but cannot find alignment in their purpose or desires in life. Even though this poem brought me back to the Old West with your words and imagery, it sparks relevance in so many modern-day love stories. I really loved these lines: "Now he's running from the law, his shadow on the plain Running away from all he's known, gunslinger in the rain." Great job! Lovely, powerful piece.
Excellent poem with great imagery. Well done!
Whoaaaa! All these emotions! Absolutely loved the imageries and the story. You did an excellent job with this poem! I loved it!
Beautiful piece and very well written.
What a package deal!! Gorgeous art and talented words. I really felt like I was there in these moments. Great imagery too. Loved it :)
Loved your words and the fantastic images in this