Dance of Absolution
A villanelle drawn from the maxim that [sometimes] you have to lose yourself to find yourself.
"Yes." I inhale. "You are quite right."
My golden embers burn into the sketchy dusk and fade away.
"It is much easier to lose yourself at night."
I lean into the brace of our shadows as they rise to steal the light,
dancing in the hushed score of a frayed end day.
"Yes." I exhale. "You are quite right,
dying is much better when done out of sight.
We are creatures, and this is our way.
It is much easier to lose yourself at night.
There is a depth to the dark that is absent to the bright."
I smile. You are already halfway to far away.
"Yes." I nod. "You are quite right,
we should give ourselves completely. Why put up a fight?
We can breathe in the dark and be where we stray.
It is much easier to lose yourself at night."
My breath plumes from me. A phoenix taking flight.
I close my eyes and feel the world in sway.
"Yes," I whisper, "You are quite right,
it is much easier to lose yourself at night."
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About the Creator
Caroline Jane
Warm-blooded vertebrate, domesticated with a preference for the wild. Howls at the moon and forages on the dark side of it. Laughs like a hyena. Fuelled by good times and fairy dust. Writes obsessively with no holes barred.
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Comments (40)
well, this is ethereal and lovely!
You can put music to this poem. You created an emotional movement with this piece.
Beautiful poem ❤️ It had the essence of a romantic song. Loved it❤️ Congratulations on your win!
Excellent poem! I loved your dialogue.
Congratulations ! I love how you managed to make this sound modern even within a traditional form.
Congratulations, Caroline! 😍 I loved this one from the start! Well-deserved! 🤗
Wow! This was so unique, Caroline. I see why it earned a badge. Congrats!!!
Awesomeeee congratulations!!! 🎉💖🎊🎉💖🎊
Congratulations again, Caroline! This is one of my favorites1
Congrats! This was excellent in all ways! Resonated strongly!
Ms Jones congrats on another bloody marvellous placement! Well done well done!
Congratulations!!
Love this message and terrific Villanelle! Came here by way of your leaderboard placement! Congrats Caroline. 😊👏
This one is definitely a contender. I'd wish you luck in the challenge but I don't think you need it 😎
Wow. Congrats on top story🎉🎉🎉
I loved this. Made me thoughtful and sort of longing for quiet to contemplate.
This was hauntingly beautiful! Calming and yet bone chilling in the sentiment it carried as a theme!! Great work Caroline and congrats on Top Story!
Absolutely brilliant! Congratulations!
Congratulations on the top story. The intricacy of this is breathtaking. Lines like I close my eyes and feel the world in sway just swept me away. Amazing work
So clever! I haven't got the hang of this form 😁
Wonderful!!! Love this!!! ❤️❤️💕Congratulations on Top Story!!!
Gobsmacked, Caroline, absolutely. Wow. This is a winner, I smell it in the air. What a brilliant villanelle! The way you enjambed your lines, continued sentences across stanzas, is just amazingly done. Bravo!
I'm back to say congratulations on your Top Story!
Congrats on Top Story. Lovely Villanelle.
Oh, Caroline, lassie. What did I say? Hm? What did I say? lol. Congrats on a fine fine fineass Top Story!