But Damn, those hot pants
Rare car, Mercedes-Benz 300 SLR Uhlenhaut Coupé
greased up, the hottest day of the summer
I was thinking why was this longitudinally-mounted 3.0-litre engine kicking on me—-
When I saw you in those hot pants
And my engine light came on,
I saw your blue moon, I was hypnotized
Like how two of the Mercedes-Benz 300 SLR Uhlenhaut Coupé were ever produced
And one has a red interior and
Mine is blue
Like you, you look blue
Blue like that one day I sat alone at that high school party waiting for my date to show up, and somehow I always knew she wasn’t going to show up
And so she never did
And I saw that papier-mâché decorated to look like a snowflake on the punch table, blue snowflakes for the winter formal
And I tore it into pieces,
And now you’re here, looking as rare as my car is, and those old tore up snowflakes,
And like me too,
And damn
I can’t fire off too soon, or else I’ll keep getting this kick back,
But you’re wearing those blue hot pants like they are in season
under this hot blistering summer sun,
Subdued, I feel sprinkled in a sort of rare form of blue divination
As you wink at me
And the car starts roaring thunder.
About the Creator
Melissa Ingoldsby
I am a published author on Patheos.
I am Bexley is published by Resurgence Novels here.
The Half Paper Moon is available on Golden Storyline Books for Kindle.
My novella Carnivorous is to be published by Eukalypto soon! Coming soon
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Comments (10)
Well done!
Awesome!!! Loving it!!!
Damn. this was incredible! Loved it. Such sparse words, but such intricate and detailed storytelling. and I welcome all uses of the word "damn". Well done, Melissa!
You have a new fan! 💞
Perfection
Absolutely great fun with so many implied analogies , love it sis
Wowwww, this was soooo hot! Loved the emotions going on here! 🔥🔥🔥
I loved the prose and the ending line. 💕
Really great! This felt so real, loved the perspective and the details you painted!
Damn that was straight fire!!! I loved the way you wove all of those elements together, the girl, the guy, the car, the pants, the colors, awesome :)