As the Sun Sets
Inspired by Rumi's "A Prayer"
Drown out this world for me,
my love,
until my ears are filled with nothing but splendor.
Poets of yore have asked that our path be made as pleasant as a garden,
and I have joined them in that prayer every night.
Let this love be a shadow
To follow wherever you may go.
Let it be water
To sustain you each day.
And let it be wine
To grow better with age.
The sun sets,
and I am whole.
The sun rises,
and no longer do I impatiently wait
for another night
in which a dream of you must suffice.
You are here,
with me,
and together
we shall approach this new day
hand in hand.
About the Creator
S. C. Almanzar
I am a graduate student studying anthropology and have been writing creatively for almost 20 years. I love new takes on alternative history, especially when there are fantasy or supernatural elements included.
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She looked at her son. He was a man now really. Moments came when she saw glimpses of the boy he once was but rarely and they were snatched by her when he didn't know that he was being scrutinised by someone trying to make sense of who this person was, what he would become.
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Let this love be a shadow.. simply beautiful!
What a soul-nourishing poem! Well deserving of a Top Story!
congratulations on top story
Congratulations!!! This is creativity at work.
This is incredible from start to finish. Such pleasant and perfect flow and the ending was masterful! Well done on a fine poem and for it being awarded Top Story!
Congrats! 🎉
Beautiful and vivid. Congrats on top story :)
what a lovely image of no longer having to wait - being in it, and recognising yourself there.
Beatiful poem!
Very effective (the bard would be proud)!
This is beautifully done. I love the way you ended it. Congrats on Top Story.
awesome!!! these were my favorite lines ''Let it be water To sustain you each day. And let it be wine To grow better with age'' congratulations on top story! :)
Great poem! Really great!
This Poet is amazing! Really I love reading this Great Work Almanzar.
This is so beautiful and heartwarming.
Lovely love poem!!! Left some love!!!♥️♥️💕
Great work! It's always wonderful when we have someone in our life that makes us look forward to tomorrow and, who can make our life greater and more grand than the ones we dream at night.
Awww, this was so sweet and lovely! Such a wonderful poem! I enjoyed it so much!
This is splendid! Wow!