The Real Tale of Jack and Jill
For LC's Unofficial Fairytale Challenge!
Have you ever heard the tale about Jack and Jill and their attempts to fetch a pail of water from the well at the top of a hlll? I bet you've heard the clean and whimsical cut, and not the one that will make you sick to your gut.
You see so much is left out of these tales of old, the lightness made it easier for the books to be sold.
Listen to me as I tell you the real tale, for I am not bothered by poor book sales.
Jack and Jill were given to argue and fight as siblings have done since time and memorial. The day in question, therefore, was one like no other, when a fight erupted between sister and brother.
He had pulled her hair and punched her chest, the reason for his actions, we can but guess. Power and control at his behest, to lord over this sister without pause or rest.
Jack, though, did not count on his sister's spirit, to her gentle guile and quiet cunning he never gave much merit.
As they climbed the hill to the well at the top, Jill had a mischevious smile on her face and a spring in her hop. Jack on the other hand had evil intent, on Jill's demise he was so hell bent.
As they reached the summit, he reached for his wooden bat, just as Jill leaned over to stroke a purring cat. Jack was not as quick or clever as Jill, and with one swell push, she sent him down the hill.
Jill whistled with delight as she fetched the water, and made her way down the hill crying with laughter. She made her way home and exclaimed to her mother, that she had defended herself from her ill-intent brother.
His body lay there at the bottom of the hill, and his bones remain there to this day still. The lesson, you ask, what could it be? Ne'er a bully like Jack you should be.
One day you might find yor match, and over your shoulder you should keep watch. For a sibling, spouse or your closest friend, may turn to violent revenge in the end.
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Thanks for reading!
Author's Notes: Fairly self-explanatory - 366 words of the True Story that happened between the rival siblings, Jack and Jill! Here is details of LC's awesome unofficial challenge:
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Paul Stewart
Scottish-Italian poet/writer from Glasgow.
Overflowing in English language torture and word abuse.
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Comments (12)
Hi, Paul! (I hate to be THAT person, but) I have created a new challenge and would love for you to check it out! (just in case it's something you'd be interested in) Keep up the great work! https://vocal.media/writers/inside-the-animal-s-mind-an-unofficial-challenge
Great entry. Thank you for including the Content Warning. Gave me a chance to prep for the gut punch. In case you mind - typo spotted in your fourth line "tiem and". ;)
Paul, this is a fantastic entry! I love the pace and flow of the story, as well as the rhyming you kept within to keep the feel of a fairytale. Super clever and thought-out. Just incredible all around.
Scarily well written! I forgot about the brothers Grimm… this is probably very close to the original story 😵💫
Well-wrought! Actually, many of the details of those Grimm stories were... pretty grim. For instance, in Cinderella, the stepsisters cut off their toes to try to fit into the glass slipper. Naturally, Disney didn't include that part, but I think there is an apt lesson in that, akin to cutting off one's nose to spite one's face!
I've known a few cruel Jill's in my life! This was a great take on the fucked up fairy tales challenge! Good luck!
Well done!
I can see myself as Jill. Hehehehehehe. Loved your version of this! 🍩🥐
Jack fell down and broke his crown cause Jill kicked his ass! I like your version better, Paul! Well done!
Oh, sibling rivalries! lol. Nice take on the challenge. :)
Thank you, pal, for bringing the truth to light, and for the reminder of why I always keep one eye on Pam!
Oh Jack...he should never of underestimated his sister.