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THE PROPOSAL

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By Babs IversonPublished 14 days ago 1 min read
Top Story - February 2024
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Pixabay by nidan

Wearing his best suit, Peter strutted around the wedding reception area as if he owned the building.

From the moment he saw Paula, they were inseparable soul mates.

Six months later, Peter thought about how he would propose on Valentine's Day.

The gray skies opened up. Large fluffy white snowflakes swirled from the sky. Outside their window, the landscape became a picturesque winter wonderland. Snow accumulated on the ground like a blanket of sparkling diamonds.

Observently, Peter had an epiphany. Deciding that once it stopped snowing, he would make a snow angel and a "Will you marry me?" message.

Afterward, Peter smiled and rubbed his nose. He was proud of his snow angel with the stomped and packed letters spelling out his proposal.

Awaking to the smell of coffee, Paula smiled sweetly at Peter.

"Happy Valentine's Day, I have something to show you!" Peter exclaimed.

Peter opened the curtains and gasped at the sight of falling snow. The snowstorm erased the snow angel and his message. Tears welled in Peter's eyes.

"Paula, the snow is sparkly, like your eyes," Peter whispered.

Instinctively Paula knew. Tacitly, Paula shook her head yes. From his robe pocket, Peter pulled out an engagement ring and placed it on her finger.

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"Gram look! It's snowing on Valentine's Day! " exclaimed their grandchildren.

"Please tell us the story again!" the grandchildren shouted.

Coyly, Gram asked, "The Proposal" story?

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About the Creator

Babs Iverson

Barbara J Iversen, also known as Babs Iverson, lives in Texas and loves her grandkids to the moon and back. After writing one story, she found that writing has many benefits especially during a pandemic and a Texas-size Arctic Blast.

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  • Daphsam3 days ago

    Awwww, what a beautiful story.

  • I M A KING4 days ago

    Beautifully written

  • Real Poetic4 days ago

    Awww so sweet!!! 🥹 ❤️

  • Laura Lann4 days ago

    So precious 💖

  • Penny Fuller5 days ago

    What a sweet story. Congratulations on your top story!

  • Anna 5 days ago

    Congrats on Top Story!🥳

  • E.K. Daniels6 days ago

    Touching, Babs. 🥰

  • Tamil9 days ago

    Sweet

  • Tiffany Gordon 9 days ago

    Fabulous writing babs! I absolutely love this story!!!!

  • Rachel M.J9 days ago

    Naaaw, this is so sweet!

  • Ashley Shiflett9 days ago

    What a great story!!! ❤️

  • Great story and well deserved accolade

  • Joe O’Connor10 days ago

    Just in time for Valentine's Day! I like the jump at the end to Gram telling the story to her grand-kids. "Large fluffy white snowflakes swirled from the sky."- great description:)

  • sleepy drafts11 days ago

    Oh, I just *adore* this, Babs! This is so, so heartwarming, sweet, observant, and beautifully told. I just loved this piece. Congratulations on a beautiful Top Story!!! 💕❤️💕❤️

  • Shirley Belk11 days ago

    Oh, this is so very lovely!!!! Perfect for Valentines Day :)

  • Mariann Carroll11 days ago

    This was so Romantic 💝💗💗💗Congratulations,Babs 🏆

  • ROCK 11 days ago

    Hi! I really liked this and found you through ViM productions FB page where your story was highlighted. I have subscribed. Congratulations 👏👏👏

  • Very sweet and romantic!! Congratulations on your top story 💕

  • Hoàng Sang12 days ago

    Ôi thật ngọt ngào. Rất thích nó và chúc mừng TS Babs

  • Lana V Lynx12 days ago

    Charming and heartwarming, I really liked the ending as well.

  • Donna Fox (HKB)12 days ago

    I love this Babs!! it has the sweet and timeless kind of feel to it and is just so heart warming!! Great work and congrats on Top Story!

  • Back to say congratulations on your Top Story! 🎉💖🎊🎉💖🎊

  • Sian N. Clutton12 days ago

    Aw, this is lush. It made me feel a little happier, Babs! So much love in the world xx

  • Amy Black12 days ago

    Super cute! Very clever.

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