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The Firstborn Scam

A Fantasy Microfiction

By Natasja RosePublished 7 months ago Updated 3 months ago 1 min read
Top Story - May 2023
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The Firstborn Scam
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I stared down the Demon. He stared back, one eyebrow (out of many) raised. "That is all you ask for? Your firstborn, in exchange for your pre-pregnancy figure?"

I nodded. "Yes. Is the request too great for you?"

He (She? It?) snarled. "The deal is struck. Expect me after the birth."

The demon vanished, leaving behind the smell of sulphur.

I teleported home, a gift from another demon. In the mansion, my husband waited. "How many does that make?"

I glanced at the list: magical powers, long life and good health, youth, riches, and immunity from all prosection; all granted in exchange for custody and possession of our firstborn.

Thankfully, the demon who granted immunity from prosecution thought I'd mispronounced it, and hadn't questioned why a Minority would want freedom from persecution. I hadn't corrected his assumption, and looked forward to the fireworks when a bunch of angry supernatural beings realised they'd been tricked and couldn't do a damn thing about it.

"Four demons, a god, three eldritch abominations, and two witches."

We exchanged a high-five, laughing. Neither of us had wanted to be parents, so when we discivered the pregnancy too late to do anything about it, we had to get creative.

My husband raised my hand to his lips, and I could feel him smile against my skin. "I have to say, I wish them all the best of luck co-parenting."

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About the Creator

Natasja Rose

I've been writing since I learned how, but those have been lost and will never see daylight (I hope).

I'm an Indie Author, with 30+ books published.

I live in Sydney, Australia

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  • The Invisible Writer2 months ago

    Very creative!

  • Teresa Renton3 months ago

    Great story, a perfect flash 🤗

  • Lilly Cooper3 months ago

    It's a great twist! Best of luck with the VMAs. You have as much of a chance as anyone else. You have to be in it to win it.

  • Phil Flannery3 months ago

    Cruel, sadistic, clever. That's an interesting idea. Good read. More please.

  • Alexander McEvoy3 months ago

    Haha! That would be amazing!! This story was fantastic!

  • Rachel Deeming3 months ago

    Co-parenting demons! Dark, funny and a bit disturbing. I liked it.

  • Sian N. Clutton3 months ago

    Way to leave 'em wanting more! Well done!

  • Adam Clost7 months ago

    A wonderfully clever take..... and it really makes me want and entire story/book. However, the fact that you leave us with the image of the scammer thinking they've duped so many also allows imagination to play havoc with what might come next. Great job in so few words.

  • AJ Coyne7 months ago

    Yeesh. Disturbing. Sounds like Chemosh. No thanks.

  • Tiffany Gordon 7 months ago

    Brilliant writing & storytelling!

  • Sandra Matos7 months ago

    Great story using twisted humor! Congrats!

  • F. Leonora Solomon7 months ago

    this is twisted with just the right dash of dark humor!😈

  • Caroline Jane7 months ago

    Sinister and surprising! Well done. ❤️

  • Jagan S7 months ago

    Nice

  • Farhan Mirza 7 months ago

    awesome , well written

  • Kelly Robertson7 months ago

    Aha that was clever! The last final sealed it all. Well done!

  • Fatima Khan7 months ago

    https://vocal.media/poets/if-we-were-dragons

  • Dana Crandell7 months ago

    Clever! Congratulations!

  • J. R. Lowe7 months ago

    Hahah the last line is so good! Wasn’t sure where this was going but you wrapped it up nicely

  • beautiful

  • congratulations 🎉💖✨

  • Stéphane Dreyfus7 months ago

    Highly amusing!

  • Gal Mux7 months ago

    Haha hilarious and great gifts!

  • Sara Frederick7 months ago

    Simply delightful. It made me laugh out loud.

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