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Starcrossed Lovers

My version of how the Sun and Moon came to be.

By Donna Fox (HKB)Published 9 months ago 1 min read
Top Story - July 2023
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Starcrossed Lovers
Photo by Tyler van der Hoeven on Unsplash

As the sun will set

The moon will rise

Never to meet

Each other’s eyes

Destined to be apart

One’s time will to end before

the other’s will start

A glance but nothing more

Once lovers with passion

Unrivalled by the Gods

Who felt no compassion

By putting them at odds

The punishment they bare

For flaunting a love so rare

Giving her a heated flare

And him the cold night air

Destined to remain apart

Punished for their love

Longing for the other’s heart

Watching us from above

She became the sun

And he the moon

Their love story is done

Each singing a new tune

Their love will never be requited

Together again, they will never be

For this the Gods will be delighted

Having separated them for eternity

A note from the author:

This is my version of the myth of how the sun and moon came to be. There are a lot of versions of the story of their creation, some say they are lovers and others say brother - sister. Some of the mythologies even state they have no relation what so ever, which is very intreguing to me.

In my version I have chosen lovers that have flaunted it before the Gods and were thusly punished. Doomed to rule separate realms of the human word and unable to meet again. Used as a warning and lesson to others who dare flaunt their love before others.

This was inspired by a poem I read a long time ago about the sun and moon falling in love and giving birth to the stars. I wish I could remember the author and where I read it, so I could add the link but unfortnately I am at a loss.

However, I altered the story by adding a bit of a twist to it, to give it more of a tragic/ star crossed lovers feel. I hope you have enjoyed my version of this myth, thank you for the read!

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About the Creator

Donna Fox (HKB)

Thank you for stopping by!! 💚💙💜🩵

If you are interested in longer works by me, I have two books published on Amazon.

Jogger's Trail and Fox in The Hole.

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  • Dharrsheena Raja Segarran4 months ago

    Had a little bit of free time and what better way to spend it then in your profile! I guess this is why some people keep things private. Because we never know who's genuinely happy for us and who's actually jealous. It's just so sad that they're people like that. I loved that you added your own twist to this myth! I enjoyed the reread! 🥰🥰🥰

  • Carly Bush8 months ago

    Such a cool take on an interesting prompt. Love this!

  • ema9 months ago

    It's a wonderful poem Donna ❤. The impossible love between two such different and opposite entities is heartbreaking. The gods are always cruel and envious!

  • Poppy 9 months ago

    Gorgeous poem and I loved the concept behind it too. Congrats on top story!

  • Pravi9 months ago

    Enter the vocal writing contest! https://awards.vocal.media/nomination?grsf=pravi-0j1k2t

  • Lamar Wiggins9 months ago

    I really loved this poem and the authors note that followed. Great work, Donna and congrats!

  • Zeeshan May9 months ago

    Starcrossed Lovers: A captivating tale of the origin of the Sun and Moon, reimagining their creation in my own version!!! https://vocal.media/authors/zeeshan-may

  • Ruth Stewart9 months ago

    This is such a lovely poem, it touched my heart. Well done!

  • Petro Wolmarans9 months ago

    O My word. Everything flows in one. Loved it.

  • Kristen Balyeat9 months ago

    Oh my goodness, spectacular! Absolutely love this myth! Great job and congrats on top story!

  • JBaz9 months ago

    A great tribute to the unknown author, and a beautifully tale you told. Love it Congratulations

  • Novel Allen9 months ago

    You are on a roll my lovely child Donna. Enjoy the glitz and glamour of stardom . May you ever shine like the sun. Congrats.

  • Awesomeeee! You got a Top Story for this! Yayyyyyy! Congratulations! 🎉💖🎊🎉💖🎊

  • Andrei Z.9 months ago

    It's interesting that you chose the sun to be feminine, and the moon masculine. I've (haha, and the Greek mythology as well) always had the opposite associations in my head:)

  • Grz Colm9 months ago

    Hey, great work Donna. ☺️👏 Congrats on your top story.

  • Kennedy Washika9 months ago

    Wonderful work. this reminds me of past events in my life.

  • Yulianto Arif9 months ago

    Congratulations.!

  • Simply Explorer9 months ago

    Loving it... Amazing feel :) Congratulations.!

  • Real Poetic9 months ago

    Congratulations! 🎊

  • Margaret Brennan9 months ago

    Have you ever seen the movie, Lady Hawk? Great movie and this reminds me of it. Love it.

  • Babs Iverson9 months ago

    Swoon!!! Love and loving this!!!❤️❤️💕 Congratulations on T S too!!!

  • Congratulations on your Top Story💯😉🎉

  • Dana Crandell9 months ago

    Wonderful, evocative words, Donna! Congratulations on Top Story!

  • Jazzy 9 months ago

    I loved this version, this is almost like my childrens book i wrote about the same thing!!!! Love this so much! 🖤

  • Passionate; Beautiful!

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