Starcrossed Lovers
My version of how the Sun and Moon came to be.
As the sun will set
The moon will rise
Never to meet
Each other’s eyes
Destined to be apart
One’s time will to end before
the other’s will start
A glance but nothing more
Once lovers with passion
Unrivalled by the Gods
Who felt no compassion
By putting them at odds
The punishment they bare
For flaunting a love so rare
Giving her a heated flare
And him the cold night air
Destined to remain apart
Punished for their love
Longing for the other’s heart
Watching us from above
She became the sun
And he the moon
Their love story is done
Each singing a new tune
Their love will never be requited
Together again, they will never be
For this the Gods will be delighted
Having separated them for eternity
A note from the author:
This is my version of the myth of how the sun and moon came to be. There are a lot of versions of the story of their creation, some say they are lovers and others say brother - sister. Some of the mythologies even state they have no relation what so ever, which is very intreguing to me.
In my version I have chosen lovers that have flaunted it before the Gods and were thusly punished. Doomed to rule separate realms of the human word and unable to meet again. Used as a warning and lesson to others who dare flaunt their love before others.
This was inspired by a poem I read a long time ago about the sun and moon falling in love and giving birth to the stars. I wish I could remember the author and where I read it, so I could add the link but unfortnately I am at a loss.
However, I altered the story by adding a bit of a twist to it, to give it more of a tragic/ star crossed lovers feel. I hope you have enjoyed my version of this myth, thank you for the read!
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Donna Fox (HKB)
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Had a little bit of free time and what better way to spend it then in your profile! I guess this is why some people keep things private. Because we never know who's genuinely happy for us and who's actually jealous. It's just so sad that they're people like that. I loved that you added your own twist to this myth! I enjoyed the reread! 🥰🥰🥰
Such a cool take on an interesting prompt. Love this!
It's a wonderful poem Donna ❤. The impossible love between two such different and opposite entities is heartbreaking. The gods are always cruel and envious!
Gorgeous poem and I loved the concept behind it too. Congrats on top story!
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I really loved this poem and the authors note that followed. Great work, Donna and congrats!
Starcrossed Lovers: A captivating tale of the origin of the Sun and Moon, reimagining their creation in my own version!!! https://vocal.media/authors/zeeshan-may
This is such a lovely poem, it touched my heart. Well done!
O My word. Everything flows in one. Loved it.
Oh my goodness, spectacular! Absolutely love this myth! Great job and congrats on top story!
A great tribute to the unknown author, and a beautifully tale you told. Love it Congratulations
You are on a roll my lovely child Donna. Enjoy the glitz and glamour of stardom . May you ever shine like the sun. Congrats.
Awesomeeee! You got a Top Story for this! Yayyyyyy! Congratulations! 🎉💖🎊🎉💖🎊
It's interesting that you chose the sun to be feminine, and the moon masculine. I've (haha, and the Greek mythology as well) always had the opposite associations in my head:)
Hey, great work Donna. ☺️👏 Congrats on your top story.
Wonderful work. this reminds me of past events in my life.
Congratulations.!
Loving it... Amazing feel :) Congratulations.!
Congratulations! 🎊
Have you ever seen the movie, Lady Hawk? Great movie and this reminds me of it. Love it.
Swoon!!! Love and loving this!!!❤️❤️💕 Congratulations on T S too!!!
Congratulations on your Top Story💯😉🎉
Wonderful, evocative words, Donna! Congratulations on Top Story!
I loved this version, this is almost like my childrens book i wrote about the same thing!!!! Love this so much! 🖤
Passionate; Beautiful!