Serendipitic
For Heather's 'Unscramble Challenge' 🤍
Attempt 2 at Heather Hubler's challenge. The last was an epic fail because I didn't clock the 12 letter word specification. Exactly the same as the first, but here's an adapted adjectival version. And no, it's not a 'real' word but it is indeed, 'of my choosing'.
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The valley was pristine. Destiny had yet to bring the fear and pride of the deities and deniers.
Between the inspired blades of morning, a serpent, iridescent with spidery layers, ripened the soil for miracles.
Eden spirited among the trees. A pincered tongue snipered through her skin.
She lay unmoving but the ground shifted. Bathing her wound in pyridine, The only price of septic insertion would be a precise dent.
Her village was on the verge of collapse as the boys of her childhood fought. She sprinted to the grove, gathering the plants that had nursed her.
The snake spied.
Their eyes met, it bowed deeply and she in turn nodded her respect.
Tired, She carried her treasure home and rinsed the wounds of her men.
They would live long enough to fight the ensuing enemy and she, long enough to share the healing of her serendipitic encounter.
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Celia in Underland
Just a voice finding its echo. Teacher - reader-writer-cat lover. Wanderer. Weirder than a koala in The Arctic. Magpie for shiny words and stuff. Taking the scenic route home.
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Comments (14)
Wait, I thought I commented on this before.
Boom...crikey...I missed this...this was so well-deserved to place. It has your ability to bring us into a history-soaked world and lead us through a hypnotic tale. Wonderful stuff, pal, wonderful! Congrats again!
Well deserved placing in Heather’s challenge! Amazing effort, telling the story so well with such random words discovered in the original 12 lettered one!🤩
Congrats!
Congratulations on your win! Clearly, it is well-deserved! This is excellent. You have mastered the micro-fiction for sure!
You have such a way of weaving words...always magical.
I appreciated the little nods to Biblical times, and loved that you revamped this to fit the criteria as it was such a clever piece. I felt the whole scene playing out before me which is an incredible feat considering the constraints. Fantastic work, my friend :) Thanks for playing!!
I'm glad that you found a way to enter your poem into the challenge. Though I do feel the need to ask, if "serendipitic" is not a real word (it seems like it should be), why didn't you spell it "serendipityc" so that you could still have claimed all the words you had before? Yep, I'm a trouble maker. But you already knew that, didn't you Celia?
This is kinda biblical. Not sure it that was the intent, but that's what I'm getting. Maybe because it's Good Friday. Either was, incredible writing.
Huh…didn’t even notice the last one was a letter short! Just as before, this is an excellent micro and challenge entry! You took a creative approach and it certainly paid off!
Spectacular!!! Superb lines!!! Loved it!!!💕❤️❤️
Whoaaaa, this was a magnificent story! I loved so much!
"Eden spirited among the trees. A pincered tongue snipered through her skin." The flow is incredible Celia!! Love the way this reads aloud. Awesome piece Celia!! 🤍
So good Celia!