Little Wisps
A Story Every Day in 2024 May 27th 148/366
"You're a fool! What were you thinking?"
He's right. I am a fool and an old one at that. I was thinking, or at least, I think I was thinking about, oh, it escapes me now, but I know that it was important and so, I was focused on that, whatever it was.
"Let's get your hand under the tap, quick!"
Oh, that water's really cold! Oh, it's almost as bad as the burning. Yes, it seered, so sharp, and I can remember wondering what I'd done. I must have put it on something hot. Did I forget the thingy? I did that once when I was little. I picked up a kettle and the lid wasn't on properly and I hadn't noticed and the steam was bursting out the top, like an angry word and it hit my hand and I dropped it, and oh, my mother did go mad.
"There. The water's helping. Let's just keep your hand there now."
I can feel it tingling, tingling with hot and cold. What did I forget? I want to dry my hands.
"Just leave it there, just a bit more and then, we'll have a look at it."
I'm doing more and more strange things of late. The other day I watered the plants with bleach or at least, that's what Glenn said I did. He came home from golf and I was pouring Domestos into the ficus we have in the lounge. He asked me what I was doing and I looked down and saw that I wasn't holding a jug. I think I'd left it somewhere. I knew I had to clean the toilet and had picked up bleach instead, I suppose.
"There we go, love. You sit there. I don't think you've got too much damage. I caught you just in time."
I won't be able to catch anything. My hand is hurting.
"I'll sort the dinner, love. You just sit there."
I don't know what I'd do without Glenn. I don't like it when he leaves the house.
I'm losing myself. Glenn says I'm okay. My mind....
Little wisps. Trying to grasp. Disappearing into nothing, just like the steam of that kettle.
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Comments (12)
So poignant, Rachel. Your word choice is pristine here, and you truly capture the dread, confusion, and fear of such tragic mental deterioration.
Rachel, the way you take an everyday event and make your reader feel attached and invested in the characters experiencing them is amazing! Bravo!
Rendered so tenderly, without sentimentality. Love your story, though it tugs at my heart, which of course means, well written!!!
You’re so good at taking snippets of life and making them life itself. That’s talent.
Very well done and very sad. The confusion coupled with the awareness that something is amiss is absolutely heartbreaking
You capture her confusion due to the loss of short term memory perfectly in your story. I love how you connect the ‘wisps’ of memory back to the steam from the tea pot. Once again you have written an utterly convincing slice of life, Rachel! I loved it!
It is heartfelt. A great job!
Dementia is a terrible trick. Great job of describing it.
Really sad story:(
So sadly sweet… with Glenn trying his best. Effective stop, start thoughts… ‘My mind.... Little wisps. Trying to grasp. Disappearing into nothing, just like the steam of that kettle.’
Considerable pathos is conjured by this narrative; the choice of the first person point of view was shrewd.
This was so sad 🥺 I wish I would be as patient as Glenn if the need ever arises