Smoke stings, burns. Eyes, throat, nose. I'm carrying Emma and Donnie, my youngest.
I stumble. Despite my assurances I'll get you out, my mind sees my babies burn. No answer to that, only a raw scream. I sew it inside my skin with iron, and run.
Outside, I gulp clean night air. Sweet. Brief.
"Stay there!"
They wail after me.
Running back into a wall of heat, covering my face... Something falls. I skitter sideways. I nearly went down, almost left them to burn...
At Darcy's room, I hear, "Mummyyyyy!"
She's OK! Relief! I hold her tight.
"Turn your face into me."
Worryingly, there are no shouts from Brodie or Finn. They're limp, unresponsive.
I should get them out first. But leave her-? No. Bathroom? Can't get to it.
"Piggyback!"
Terror radiates off her. I squash mine, hoping she doesn't see it. Crouch so she can climb on. Clutch the boys to me, stagger to my feet. I welcome Darcy's choking embrace.
Flames against my skin... clothes catching fire. Dreamlike, my legs just won't GO fast enough.
Dumping them on the grass, screaming hoarsely at gawping neighbours: "HELP!!!!"
Sucking cool air down into my burnt lungs-
-running again. Coughing. Skin crackling.
At Anna's room, I look round wildly. Bed empty, smouldering. Not here. Good! The room's almost completely aflame.
"ANNA!" A useless whisper.
Maybe she got to the bathroom before that area was engulfed?
Now I scream, bursting through the furnace. She's in the tub on soaked towels, shower running, horror on her face.
I must look like a monster emerging.
I wrap the towels round us. Cool dampness soaks through; tiny relief.
"Hold me tight, ok?"
"Mum, I ca-"
Can't let her finish that treacherous thought. No way to prepare her, I grab her, and GO.
Oh! We're afire! She's heavy! And scared! If I set her down, she mightn't make it out.
Blind now, smoke worse. Blundering in (please!) the right direction.... I smell cooking flesh. Hear it. The balm I pour into my mind: it's ok, that's just me...
Out on the lawn, I register the fire engine (at last!). Someone's helping Brodie and Finn. I sag, the fire going out of me.
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Word count, excluding note: 366
Submitted on 6th June
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Comments (8)
This was intense!
Oof. I’m glad you’re writing short stories as I think I was holding my breath the entire time. This was so good.
Intense and terror-filled, this one sings! Your line: "I sew it inside my skin with iron, and run" knocked me over almost literally. Powerful writing, L.C. Sensational work!!!
My God, that was intense. 😳
Why does this woman has so many kids? Sheeesh! Use protection, lady! Look how much trouble you have to go through to save them. Smh
Intense! Did she burn? Is that why the fire went out of her 😱🔥
Wow... I think I held my breath the whole time!! So intense and heart stopping, that second last paragraph speaks volumes about a mother's love "I smell cooking flesh. Hear it. The balm I pour into my mind: it's ok, that's just me..." Just breath taking!! Amazing work LC!!
So tense and gripping!