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In a Flash

Even the best laid plans go awry.

By Kevin McLaughlinPublished about a year ago 1 min read
Top Story - June 2023

They say everything changes in a flash and plans go to waste, leaving you wondering how it all came to this. They’ll chase you to the ends of the earth for this. When they catch you they’ll want to know why.

Why did you do it?

For your son, of course. For his medication, his doctors, and just enough time to see his smile again. Only one thing in this world can stand a fighting chance at beating cancer: money. The doctors had already stolen enough from you, so what difference did it make if you took matters into your own hands?

At least that’s what you told yourself.

They say everything changes in a flash. What they don’t tell you about is the acrid taste that fills your mouth, the relentless ringing in your ears, the stinging smell of hot metal and smoke. Time stops only for a breath, and in that moment all else is rendered trivial, you know you’ve made a mistake.

Your only intent was to help your son. Your hand trembles and your knees buckle beneath you. It was only money you sought to steal. Now, you have stolen a life.

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Comments (15)

  • Dharrsheena Raja Segarranabout a year ago

    Oooo, there's definitely no coming back from that. Desperation and being forced into a corner leaves a person with no choice. Congratulations on your Top Story! I've subscribed to you!

  • Mackenzie Davisabout a year ago

    The shock of the moment the narrator realizes their mistake is all I can feel at the end of this. Amazing storytelling here. I love the parallelism in "They say" to "What they don't tell you about." Very poetic and it creates a nice bridge to bring the emotional impact to its fullest peak. 👏🏻👏🏻👏🏻

  • Heather Hublerabout a year ago

    Oh wow!!! The story already started out tragic in a way as I sympathized with them trying to care for their son, not getting the meds they needed but then it really turned tragic and so sad. Wow, great work putting so much emotion in this short piece. Congratulations on Top Story :)

  • Asif Aliabout a year ago

    wao. nicely done keep it up

  • RAJ VEERabout a year ago


  • Abigail Penhallegonabout a year ago

    Oooooh boy. It was when I hit “relentless ringing in your ears” that I knew what had happened and my whole feeling just shifted. Well done.

  • shittu gbemiabout a year ago

    Emotional, captivating, strong words. Good work.

  • Dana Stewartabout a year ago

    Well done. Such an emotional tale in so few words. Well deserved Top Story 🎉

  • Gerald Holmesabout a year ago

    Excellent story-telling. Congrats on the top story.

  • Alexander McEvoyabout a year ago

    You managed to fit so much grief and regret into only two hundred words. I am rendered speechless. <3

  • Kim Loostromabout a year ago

    I very gripping piece of microfiction! Excellent work!!

  • Cathy holmesabout a year ago

    That was really well done. Congrats on the TS

  • Paul Stewartabout a year ago

    Oh my, this was very impressive. I am now a subscriber! Well done on packing so much into 200 words. Congrats too on your Top Story!

  • ThatWriterWomanabout a year ago

    Wow! This is very emotional - in such a short word count. Welldone!

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