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Gina's Ghost

A microfiction

By Mother CombsPublished 4 months ago Updated 4 months ago 1 min read
Top Story - January 2024
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Sleep eludes me. It has wholly forsaken me. I wander through these halls all night looking for that which is lost. I look in the darkest corners and cannot find what I misplaced. But it cannot be located, for it is hidden too well. There is a cold chill that I cannot displace, no matter how many fires I pace in front of.

I know not how long I have been between waking and sleeping. I’ve not kept track. I just know I must find that which I lost so that I can sleep. Mind-numbing wakefulness has overtaken me. I drag through these halls, looking for something familiar to me. Things have changed; things have moved.

Finding nothing familiar, I continue on my way. I was going over the same floors that I had already trespassed. I hoped I had overlooked anything that would bring me the rest I so craved. My body pulled through the walls on my nightly search. I constantly looked for something I lost when I was more awake.

But I fear I shall never find that which I seek. I shall never sleep again, for I am doomed to roam these halls forever more. I am constantly searching for that which I have forgotten. I am lost with no hope of redemption. Forever a ghost among the living.

FantasyYoung AdultthrillerShort StoryPsychologicalMicrofictionHorror
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About the Creator

Mother Combs

Come near, sit a spell, and listen to tales of old as I sit and rock by my fire. I'll serve you some cocoa and cookies as I tell you of the time long gone by when your Greats-greats once lived.

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  • C. Rommial Butler3 months ago

    Congratulations on Top Story and well-wrought! I shall place this one in the comment thread of my CREATION MYTH as an introduction to your work! You've done so much to promote others, I should like to promote you, insofar as my busy schedule allows! You'll find you were today's entry in my ever-growing comment thread! https://vocal.media/poets/creation-myth-m8dm0x8d

  • Anna 3 months ago

    Congrats on Top Story!🥳

  • Novel Allen4 months ago

    Sometimes the living feel just as misplaced as those ghosts. I still feel like I am looking for something. Blessed are those who are at peace with their transition to the other side. Congrats on a haunting TS.

  • ROCK 4 months ago

    I feel sad for this lost spirit who can't enjoy peace or escape her shackles to these same old walls. I really liked it.

  • Congrats on a very restless and relatable top story!

  • 👻 That was spooky, Sharon! "Mind-numbing wakefulness has overtaken me . . ." Powerfully descriptive language! Well done!

  • Test4 months ago

    Congratulations on top story!

  • Heather Zieffle 4 months ago

    Very nice! Congrats on TS!

  • Back to say congratulations on your Top Story! 🎉💖🎊🎉💖🎊

  • Tressa Rose4 months ago

    Wow love this piece. Congrats ❤️

  • Test4 months ago

    Awesome piece. Congrats on the top story!

  • Caroline Jane4 months ago

    ❤️❤️❤️ Congratulations. I did not figure that ending!

  • Stephanie Hoogstad4 months ago

    A chilling tale with beautiful writing. Very well done, and a well-deserved Top Story. Congratulations!

  • Thavien Yliaster4 months ago

    Spoopy. I read the title and instantly thought of my homie, Gina C. Whatever's bothering thay ghost girl I hope get solved soon. It'd be a shame for her to never enjoy a nice nap again.

  • Joe Mellen4 months ago

    Great story - you had me at every word.

  • Margaret Brennan4 months ago

    CONGRATULATIONS ON TS.... THIS WRITING IN INCREDIBLE. I LOVED EVERYTHING ABOUT IT.

  • So dark and a good story

  • Kenny Penn4 months ago

    Very haunting and deliciously well done. The concept makes perfect sense, and I truly enjoyed reading it. Congrats on TS, Mother Combs!

  • hassen fraih4 months ago

    nice

  • Oneg In The Arctic4 months ago

    Ohhhhhh how layered…. How eerie… how… idk I can’t find the right word but you get the point 😂

  • Rene Peters4 months ago

    This is amazing! Congrats on top story!

  • Mohammed Azarudeen4 months ago

    It's interesting to me cool

  • Cathy holmes4 months ago

    This is excellent! Congrats on the TS.

  • I feel so sad for her. Loved your poignant story!

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