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Farewell

Just a tiny speck in the universe

By Ahna LewisPublished 10 months ago Updated 10 months ago 1 min read
Top Story - May 2023
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Photo by Mike L on Unsplash

She gazed into the sky, a bruised canvas of midnight blue, salted with stars. Light shimmered through the pines, leaving splashes of silver on the earth below.

She wasn’t sure anymore.

She had wanted to go, to join Rosamond and Leon on Gliese 667 Cc, but this world was so beautiful. Could she say good-bye? What if Gliese didn’t have forests and trees and grass and bubbling brooks? What if it was just gray dust and empty craters? She took a deep breath, absorbing the ageless beauty of the night sky.

At least she'd still have the stars.

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About the Creator

Ahna Lewis

Just a high school English teacher who never quite got over her dream of becoming an author. :)

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  • Sandra Tena Cole9 months ago

    So beautifully bittersweet ❤️

  • Donna Fox (HKB)9 months ago

    Ahna, this was a really beautiful story! Your descriptive language was breath taking, I loved the images you painted for the read with your words! You word choices and way of writing just flowed so seamlessly! I am awestruck with the vivid imagery you were able to create in my mind! My favourite line was "... a bruised canvas of midnight blue, salted with stars..." That's going to sit with me for a long time simply for the mastery of those word choices!

  • Gerald Holmes9 months ago

    This is beautiful writing. Congrats on the Top Story.

  • Paul Stewart10 months ago

    I read this a few days ago and hearted it, meant to come back sooner. Here I am and this is still stunning! Well done, Ahna, a moving piece with some truly spectacular descriptions and word choices. Congrats on Top Story.

  • Komal10 months ago

    This was really good! loved it!

  • Signor Wilson10 months ago

    The story is hanging. You left me wanting for more.

  • Heather Hubler10 months ago

    Ah, you painted such a lovely picture. So hard to say good-bye to the known. Great work on this one and congratulations on Top Story :)

  • AGB10 months ago

    Nicely done, congrats on your TS!

  • Emmanuel odeh10 months ago

    I love this great story more of that.

  • JBaz10 months ago

    Congratulations, beautifully worded, brought the world to life

  • Lamar Wiggins10 months ago

    Great story, Anha. And congrats! Luckily the stars will follow wherever she goes.

  • Pauline Fountain10 months ago

    CONGRATULATIONS AHNA!! Top Story! Pauline 🌸💕

  • Awesome, ✨💖 Congratulations 🎆🎉📝😉Top Story❗❗❗🎉🎉🎉

  • Cathy holmes10 months ago

    Very nice. Congrats on the TS

  • Gina C.10 months ago

    Yay, congrats on Top Story!! 🤗❤️❤️

  • Julia Schulz10 months ago

    The first lines were so lyrical, they drew me in!!!

  • Motunrayo Saba10 months ago

    Awesome

  • Abraham Adesanya10 months ago

    Cool

  • Sinenjabulo Mgade10 months ago

    what a great story

  • L.C. Schäfer10 months ago

    Couldn't she just come back if Gliese 667 Cc wasn't all that great?

  • Leslie Writes10 months ago

    Glad to see this one get top story. 💖

  • shae meer10 months ago

    Awesome

  • Roy Stevens10 months ago

    Congratulations on a well-deserved top story Ahna!

  • Melissa Ingoldsby10 months ago

    Very lovely work! Congratulations on top story

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