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Brief histories

For Kayleigh Fraser's micro challenge

By Hannah MoorePublished 3 months ago Updated 3 months ago 1 min read
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Brief histories
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I wrote two pieces for this challenge to write a fifty word history of the world or humanity, as I realised that the piece I had was all about fear, though it is not itself frightening, and I didnt want Kayleigh to feel she had to read it. So I have provided a buffer piece too.

Double, double toil and trouble; Fire burn, and caldron…. Good God would you look at that! Little itsy bitsy lifey stuff. So cuoooote. What the blazes? Oh ok. Legs there, some wings, all good, all good. Bit creepy. Just gonna focus on good sparkley rocks…. Ugly one broke my rocks!

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“I am afraid.”

“Me too. The world is dangerous.”

“Let’s stay close then.”

“And me?”

“And you.”

“And me?”

“And you.”

“And me?”

“Not you.”

“But he’s….”

“….Different. And besides, we only have enough.”

“He’s found others.”

“Others are dangerous.”

“I…”

“You disagree?”

“Dissent is dangerous?”

“For me or you?”

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  • Mackenzie Davis2 months ago

    "For me or for you?" Wow. That says it all, doesn't it?

  • L.C. Schäfer3 months ago

    I don't feel equal to this challenge. You smashed it 😁

  • Jay Kantor3 months ago

    Dear Hannah - Certainly an oversimplistic task - Why can't the 'Me's and U'z' all just get along. j.in.l.a.

  • JBaz3 months ago

    Well done on the contrast between the two. You said a lot in few words Really enjoyed the final line. ‘ For me or you?’

  • Oh definitely only for me (in the context of your poem, "you"). You should fly & be free & enjoy it all.

  • Amazing how much you say in s few words! ‘But he’s….” “….Different. And besides, we only have enough.” “He’s found others.” “Others are dangerous.”🫣

  • Dissent is dangerous? That's a very deep question. Loved both your stories!

  • Lamar Wiggins3 months ago

    “No, I agree, dissent can lead to danger.” I enjoyed both micros. Different takes but effective.

  • I really love both… I especially like how you used the dialogue in the second one to build up the atmosphere… and yes, it was scary in tone ! But I sincerely appreciated the warning 😁💕 It reminded me of the atmosphere of the Walking Dead (which still to this day I regret programming myself with 🙈😅)

  • Heather Hubler3 months ago

    I like how very different the tones were between the two. And yet they both worked so well :)

  • Daphsam3 months ago

    Wow, this is so good.

  • John Cox3 months ago

    The first is funny and macabre, the second is as you warned disturbing and true to life as we currently know it. Both are excellent!

  • ROCK 3 months ago

    My Mind is whirling in 12 directions from this delivery. You have quite the I interesting brain!

  • Paul Stewart3 months ago

    Woah...lot going on here in both these. That second one...love the format and sadly how real it is, so much hard honesty. Well done!

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