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103rd Times a Charm

Practice makes perfect… right?

By Heather Zieffle Published 4 months ago Updated 4 months ago 1 min read
Top Story - June 2023

“Clink! Where are we with this?” I hiss quietly, knowing my communicator will pick it up.

“Sorry Boss! This hack is taking a minute,”

“You know I’m the one stuck between two walls, right? We don’t have a minute!” I grump, readying the wall cutters.


“Yup? The fuck? Clink!”


“I swear Clink, if…”

“Got it! Go, now!”

“Fuck!” I swear, but I’m already cutting a person sized hole in the wall.

No alarms sound as I step through, and I wipe the sweat from my brow.

“Pattern, Clink! Your right, my left, like we discussed!” I demand.

My sweat soaks me as Clink walks me through the steps to get over the sensor plated flooring.

“No sweat.” I say as I make it across, sans alarm, snorting at my pun.”


“The laser wall is… 3 inches to your left.”

My heart seizes as a blare deafens me. The alarm!

“It might have been 2.5 inches,” Clink gulps.

I turn to run, too late. A hot pinch knocks the breath out of me as a bullet burst from my chest.

Jerking awake, the simulator hums as it winds down. “Clink, run it again! 103rd times a charm!”


About the Creator

Heather Zieffle

I'm new to writing and have no formal training, but recently found out how much I love it! I've self-published 3 sci-fi romance novels on Amazon, so if you're interested, please check them out!

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  • L.C. Schäfer4 months ago

    Well done on the T.S.! 😁

  • Lena Borondia4 months ago

    lol. This was both intense and well written but also somehow, hilarious at the end. Awesome job. Congrats on TS! Subscribed ;)

  • Iris Harris4 months ago

    Hahahha, that was unexpected. Brilliant. I love how captivating it was, and then surprise! Thank you.

  • Tiffany Gordon 4 months ago

    Nice writing!

  • Gal Mux4 months ago

    Very intense... I could hear the tension music playing. Great work building the atmosphere.

  • Lachlan4 months ago

    Love the momentum! Congrats on TS!

  • Kendall Defoe 4 months ago

    Impressive work with the brief form!

  • Brenton F4 months ago

    What a delightful and engaging read - so deserving of the TS! WELL DONE!

  • Dana Stewart4 months ago

    Great title and micro - I'd read the 104th's attempt!

  • Babs Iverson4 months ago

    Simulators!!! Well Done!!! Lovedit!!! Congratulations in T S too!!!❤️❤️💕

  • Heather Hubler4 months ago

    Oh, how cool!! I loved the surprise at the end. This was such an engaging read :) Congratulations on Top Story!!

  • Congratulations on your Top Story

  • And around it goes again, love the concept

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