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Rainy Saturday morning
What to do on a rainy, wet Saturday morning? You think to yourself and you begin to wonder about this little dilemma. You cared for your dog and did a few little chores. You get an idea, and you begin to write and write and write. Then, it strikes you do you start a new idea with some note, or do you continue your typing the book you finished writing for I am an old-fashioned writer that writes everything in a notebook first and I am a laborious typist. Well, I better start typing for this drabble is at end.
By Mark Graham2 years ago in Critique
Is Nagano Tonic Really as Effective as People Claim for Healthy Weight Loss Stabilization? A Critical Analysis
As more people turn to natural supplements for weight management, Nagano Tonic has emerged as a popular choice for those seeking a holistic approach to sustainable weight loss. Marketed as a gentle yet effective tonic, it claims to support metabolism, control cravings, and boost energy without the harsh effects of stimulants.
By Alvin V. Stone2 years ago in Critique
The Darkness
I’m thinking of starting a novel, but I could really use some help brainstorming ideas and themes. Here’s a quick summary of what I have in mind. If you have any suggestions on how to take this story further, I’d love to hear them! It’s going to be a sci-fi adventure about a professor who’s on a quest to uncover the secrets of the universe. But guess what? He’s not alone! A dark force is trying to show him what the universe really means, and it’s not going to be easy. He’ll have to face an ancient battle to learn the lessons he needs to find the answers he’s been searching for. A hidden world exists within our own, controlling our every move without our knowledge. Peter Edwards, a university professor, stumbles upon this alternate universe on accident during one of his late-night studies in his lab. While attempting to prove the universe is merely a cosmic accident, he senses a powerful force speaking to him. Late nights in his lab, conducting experiments and researching, led to Peter experiencing unsettling feelings. As he leaves, he catches glimpses of movement where no one should be. Shadows seem to shift and follow him. The hairs on the back of his neck stand up as if he's under intense scrutiny. There seemed to be a whole realm out there that disagreed with his entire existence. As the novel develops, Peter finds himself being sucked into another reality that only he can see. Where everyone sees a shadow or a statue, Peter sees the force behind life. The stone soldiers give him a salute as he passes it on the street. A lion’s roar causes his research paper to scatter to the floor when he finally thinks he is making progress. His research was being fought. His whole life seemed to be in a spiral. Peter confides in his wife about what is happening at work, but she is convinced he is going mad. She is terrified and begs Peter to go see a counselor and get some help. However, Peter is a stubborn man and does not wish to seek out help. His curiosity gets the best of him, and he is forced to investigate what these visions mean. Could there be something to what he is hearing and seeing? Is there more to life than his research and studies?
By Thomas Terry2 years ago in Critique
All Saints Day
November 1st is All Saints Day and a day to remember all who have gone before to the get reward what is known as Heaven. To me this is the day that my older brother died, and this is a day that I think of him as I just did. Now on this day I remember him and now my mom and dad. This is a day that is sad, but yet happy for I know that one day we will see each other again just don't know when exactly, but till then I will remember them every day. Amen.
By Mark Graham2 years ago in Critique
WIP - Neverchangeable
The Premise: I've been struggling with this story for close to a year now. It was inspired by a customer who told me a story about his friend doing something illegal, even though he'd just become a father. The customer shook his head and said, "People never change. Not really."
By sleepy drafts2 years ago in Critique
The Ersatz Elevator
Number Six of Lemony Snicket's series of the Baudelaire's. 'The Ersatz Elevator' find the children leaving Prufrock Prepatory School and living with Jerome and Esme in a very large apartment in a very tall building with a lot of rooms. What is 'In' and was is 'Out' is the question that Violet, Klaus and Sunny need to figure to save some friends and once again try to rid themselves of Count Olaf and could it happen down an elevator shaft or at an auction where people only want what is 'In'. More to come in this series of unfortunate events.
By Mark Graham2 years ago in Critique
The Notebook
On the desk is a stack of notebooks. Some are full of notes, and some are full of a little bit of everything from stories to poems to articles of various subjects. There are some that are empty and ready to be filled. What do you suppose should fill them? I know that some would start a possible novel or maybe a collection of short stories. At time I was thinking of a textbook dealing with American history for preschoolers or primary children. Yes, I am that writer with the stack of notebooks on my desk. What do you think?
By Mark Graham2 years ago in Critique
The Austere Academy
'The Austere Academy' is volume 5 of the Lemony Snicket series. This is when the Baudelaire children entered Prufrock Preparatory School after leaving Lucky Smells Lumbermill. Prufrock Prep for the Baudelaire's could be when they did make two friends and on nasty enemy in the name of Carmelita Spats. Count Olaf is always around in some disguise that always seems to fool the adults around wherever Violet, Klaus and Sunny end up for a time. 'The Austere Academy' is one story that could make one think of sending your kids to a prep school, but schools are not that bad.
By Mark Graham2 years ago in Critique
Come Sunday Morning
Come Sunday morning you take a walk alone or with your companion in this case my dog. I am watching the sunrise rising over the horizon and seeing the sky turn from a light purple to almost a red. There is that old Navy saying, "Red skies in the morning, sailors take warning, Red skies in the evening Sailors rejoice. That is not the right word, but I could never remember that one word. Sunday a time to rest and rejoice for it's a day to say thanks to the Lord for another day or two or three or more.
By Mark Graham2 years ago in Critique
