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Hi mum.

A tale of love & loss.

By Billie WhytePublished 2 months ago 3 min read
Top Story - September 2023

The rain begins to fall lightly against the pavement, as delicately as piano keys are played. Dancing upon the concrete as they hit the ground. Not before long, a crash of thunder bellows through the sky, followed by a flash of lightening that fills the surroundings with the palest blue light. The rain begins to pour heavier and heavier, causing shockwaves of sound through the city streets.

She sits on a park bench in the rain, in her bright yellow raincoat, faded blue jeans and her red wellington boots.

The wind begins to pick up, blowing the rain directly towards her face, to which she responds by lowering her head a little further, and clasping the edges of her hood around her face.

Despite Emilie's best efforts, she begins to feel the cold of the rain and the wind as it begins to howl, the thunder and lightening still haunting the darkened grey skies... but still, she waits patiently and quietly.

He said he'd be here soon. He'd always said no matter the weather.

The trees begin to whisper sweet nothings, as the wind rustles and howl through the leaves. If it wasn't for the rain, they'd be dancing around her feet but not today.

Not today.

Despite her best attempts, the ends of her hair begin to drip, her legs beginning to shake with the cold. She begins to feel it in her muscles, the kind of cold that only soup can heal. Just like a heartbreak that only a brother can heal.

Despite all, she sits and waits.





As he hurries his way around the park fountain, he catches sight of Emilie through the pouring rain. Depsite the impaired vision, the red boots and yellow coat shone through and he knew that she had always preferred to dress in bold colours, so her choice of outfit, even on a day like this... was a giveaway.

He pauses for a moment and watches as she wipes her hand across her face pondering wondering if she's wiping tears away, which would be only natural given their situation and circumstances.

'What're you waiting for. She needs you' he thought to himself.

He begins to walk towards her, deciding to cut across the grass so as to get to her quickly. Despite the signage, he knows reaching his sister is far more important.

A meager 3 feet away now, he realises that it's tears falling down her face. After all, they've just lost their mum to a long battle with cancer. It's only natural.

He sits down on the park bench with Emilie, who now notices that she's finally in company.

Her brothers company.

He begins to edge closer, all the while wrapping an arm around his sisters shoulders, pulling her in at the same time. He knows that she'd accept his tears, but he feels that he's to be strong right now...

They sit in silence, the rain begins to clear and the sun begins to peak through the clouds, bringing out a rainbow of magical colours.

They both look at each other in amazement before turning back to watch the sky light up and in almost perfect timing they both think to themselves...

Hi mum.


About the Creator

Billie Whyte

Forever wingin' it.

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  • Ibinabo Brown 2 months ago


  • velasco liama2 months ago

    Nice work i also have interesting article published

  • Onah chidera2 months ago

    Nice work (I post Scary stories)

  • Beauty Ufuomaefe2 months ago


  • Teresa Renton2 months ago

    I like moments like 'the ends of her hair begin to drip, her legs beginning to shake with the cold.; where I can see and feel with the character. Congrats on TS :)

  • Gerald Holmes2 months ago

    This is wonderful writing and a great entry for the challenge. Congrats on the Top Story

  • Phuongdinh2 months ago

    It's interesting to read your article, Cg !

  • Alex H Mittelman 2 months ago

    Fantastic! Great details and descriptions!

  • Stephanie Hoogstad2 months ago

    What a sad but sweet story. I love the rainbow at the end being taken as a sign from their mother. Congrats on the Top Story!

  • Cathy holmes2 months ago

    This is beautifully written. Congrats on the TS.

  • Sara Frederick2 months ago

    Sweet story, congratulations!

  • Babs Iverson2 months ago

    Melancholy and beautifully written!!! Loved it!!!❤️❤️💕

  • Md Zia Haider2 months ago

    WOW! Very nice article! Appreciate it.

  • Carol Townend2 months ago

    You've put a lot of emotion into this story. It's a very beautiful one, it brought tears to my eyes.

  • Donna Renee2 months ago

    This is so sweet and so sad, really beautifully written. 😢❤️

  • Linda Rivenbark2 months ago

    This felt so real, from the delicate raindrops that matched the sound of piano keys being played to the emotional sibling embrace in the pouring rain ☔. The reader feels their closeness in the simultaneous thought, Mum...The story drew me in from the first sentence.

  • Congratulations on your Top Story🎉

  • Kelsey Clarey2 months ago

    This is beautiful. It brought tears to my eyes.

  • Kenny Penn2 months ago

    Very well done, Billie. A heart breaking story with a beautiful, warm ending. Thank you for sharing and congrats on TS!

  • Belle2 months ago

    Very cute, a short enjoyable read 🥰

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