there’s a bar in this town
its so easy to hate
that opens real early
and they close real late
get anything ya want
if you ask the right way
anything at all
ya just gotta pay
pay the bouncers
pay the fiends
pay the locals
pay the touts
ya gotta pay
there’s a carpark behind the bar
broken bottles, weeds and teeth
more derelict than the denizens
of this darkened place
get ya anything you want
if you ask the right way
anything at all
ya just gotta pay
pay the jakeys
pay the junkies
pay the arseholes
pay the flunkies
ya gotta pay
and then ya gotta hope
hope ya don’t get rolled
there’s a whole ‘nother world
beyond the carpark
a whole new world
that’s not happening here
doesn’t smell like dogshit
disintegrating by degrees
it doesn’t smell like pay checks
pissed into the breeze
it doesn’t smell like futility
or last moment bent kneed pleas
it doesn’t smell like murder
copulation or disease
get ya anything you want
if you ask the right way
anything at all
but ya still gotta pay
About the Creator
Brenton F
It's just a token of my extreme - Frank Zappa
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Comments (6)
Cool piece B! Enjoyed! 😊👍
Your work always has an edge to it that I love. This was awesome 🤩
Oo, this one's really cool. I love the repetition of having to pay. It puts an invisible price tag on every line. Very cool!
https://youtu.be/MyttBg4Gg8E I hear this
This stuff is gold! Fun to read, a little dark and edgy. (my favorite!!)
Reminds me of Rorschach very well done