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For Gabriel's "Lost-ish" Unofficial Poetry Challenge

By Paul StewartPublished 2 years ago 2 min read

1 2 3 4—1 2 3

If I stare at—a word long

1 2 3—1 2 3 4

enough I lose—all sense of what

1 2 3 4—1 2 3

is where the letters—rearrange afore my

1 2 3—1 2 3 4

eyes in double—time 7/4 time

1 2 3 4—1 2 3

money cash register smash—bassline bumps along

subverted

sretaW

vert sub

ruomliG

bust veer'd

thgirW

red bed

nosaM

bus veer

nosaM

detrevbus

thgirW

bus trev

ruomliG

d'reev tsub

sretaW

bed der

dyolF

reev sub

kniP

1 2 3—1 2 3 4

I get away—from myself from the,

1 2 3 4—1 2 3

drive to get good—is it a

1 2 3—1 2 3 4

gas or is—it a crime rev

1 2 3 4—1 2 3

rev that new car—do we share

1 2 3—1 2 3 4

do we care—and I am away

1 2 3 4—1 2 3

away lost in a—haze as the

1 2 3—1 2 3 4

bassline plays away—away away away away

1—2—1—2—1—2

fade—fade away—fade—fade away—fade—fade away

1 2 3 4

fade away subvert away

depart

vert

sub

parted

fade

out

return

out fade parted sub vert depart fade away subvert away

fade in

fade

out

away

*

Thanks for reading!

Author's Notes: So, this is for Gabriel's "Lost-ish" Unofficial Poetry Challenge. Story behind it is that I was reading Silver Daux's recent Subverted poem, which is awesome, and was staring too long at the word subverted. From there the idea flowed and I was thinking about time signatures and then the song Money by Pink Floyd. That song is incidentally in the 7/4 time signature, which musicians will often count

7/4 is a time signature in music that consists of seven beats per measure. It's considered an odd time signature because it's not counted like the more common 4/4 time.

You count the beats as "1-2-3-4-5-6-7"

Break the beats up into "1-2-3-4 1-2-3" or "1-2-3 1-2-3-4"

That is a lot of information to explain the numbers in the poem and the number of words per line. There are some Pink Floyd easter eggs too.

You're welcome.

Oh, and here is a link to the song:

Here is a link to Gabriel's challenge:

Here is a link to Silver Daux's awesome poem:

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Paul Stewart

Award-Winning Writer, Poet, Scottish-Italian, Subversive.

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