vanishing echoes
obscurity
either i am growing closer or slipping further away.
choosing is not an option,
least of all making myself known.
i can't break through the barrier.
please tell me someone will remember
so i can fade in peace.
ease me down and lie if you must.
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Alivia Varvel
time is the most precious commodity
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A Flower Song
Apparently the Aztecs, Toltecs, Chichimecs and other Mexica were crazy about poetry. Despite the book-burning, slaughter, and epidemics that characterized the early stages of the Spanish conquest of the empires of Mexico, some hundreds of poems from the height of their tradition come down to us in Classical Nahuatl, preserved by Nahua and Spanish scholars of the 16th century. One of the most famous poets, Nezahualcoyotl, was a sage-king who opposed the cult of human sacrifice associated with Tezcatlipoca, God of the Smoking Mirror, and favored Quetzalcoatl, the Feathered Serpent. Flowers and feathers were the favorite offering of the Plumed Serpent. Moreover, flowers and feathers are a metaphor for poetry. Individual words, scattered petals, the down of tropical birds. The temples of blood sacrifice could be transformed into temples of flower and song. A sublimated offering to the Heart of Earth and the Heart of Sky encapsulated in the Classical Nahuatl kenning for poetry: in xōchitl in cuīcatl, meaning, "the flower and the song." The following poem is part of a longer work, and is in a state of flux, so take the waters as they flow:
By Rob Angeli2 days ago in Poets
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First and last sentences were so powerful - amazing poem!
Oo I really loved this! There's a deep desperation in this that you captured perfectly. Congrats on the Top Story!
Back to say congratulations on your Top Story! 🎉💖🎊🎉💖🎊
The last line is a stunner. ❣️
Oh that last line! Wonderful. Well done.
“ i can't break through the barrier” was a line that stuck out to me Alivia, and this reminded me of growing old and struggling with memory loss.
With writing like this...I'm sure you will be remembered by many people. Loved this take on the challenge a lot. Congrats on a fine fine fine Top Story!
Please accept my comments. It is lovely!
Gosh this was so poignant and emotional! Loved your Acrostic!
I’ll remember 💕 happy to see your name pop up again Alivia!