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Tombstone Sundial

A Haiku

By FloraPublished about a year ago β€’ 1 min read
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Tombstone Sundial
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we shallowed sundials–

shadows of days aging bones

'til stones slice the sun

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Flora

π’―π‘œπ“‡π‘œπ“ƒπ“‰π‘œ-π’·π’Άπ“ˆπ‘’π’Ή W𝓇𝒾𝓉𝑒𝓇

π•—π•šπ•”π•₯π•šπ• π•Ÿ, 𝕑𝕠𝕖π•₯𝕣π•ͺ, π•’π•Ÿπ•• π•™π•¦π•žπ• π•¦π•£

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  • Carminumabout a year ago

    (I decided to post this comment only after the TC challenge was over.) Out of excessive curiosity, I read the vast majority of the submissions, and this stood out so clearly that I don’t hesitate to call it number one. The metaphor is fresh, striking; the theme gives depth but is handled through imagery, not abstraction; alliteration and internal rhyme add flourishes (indispensable). The last line isβ€”as it should beβ€”arresting: a violent, dramatic image, evoking emotion without sentimentality. Above all, there is openness: an invitation to interpretation, and room for it. Checking all these boxes of what a good poem must have, this was the best one.

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